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Some people say that art (e. g painting, music, poetry) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can be only be made by those with special ability. discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people say that art (e. g painting, music, poetry) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can be only be made by those with special ability. v. 2
Submitted by krunal6689 on Wed, 09/28/2016 - 06: 43 Art is something which comes directly from the heart and the artist is the one, who will just displays his heart words onto a paper, in the form of a picture or a poetry etc. In my opinion, to be an artist, it requires regular practice for all to achieve a certain level. Firstly, there are some people who think that to be an artist is such easy as walking in the park. Yes, many of them can do that, but to achieve that they simply have to do daily exercise. By doing the practice in particular art will give a tremendous success. From this point of view anyone can get the attainment what they desire. But on the other hand, there are certain mankind’s, who thinks that to have a great triumph in art, a person should have special abilities. An individual with such abilities does not require, such rehearse as normal do. They have a unique vision to approach for the particular laurel. They can easily grab each small detail, where as normal’s cannot do. For example, a person who is hardworking and do regular practice will get good success, but at a certain level, he might lack. Where on the other hand an individual with the special skills will have no worry, because of the power that he has. So, last but not the least I want to conclude that, and art is something, which requires a lots of skills, hard work, practice as well as the abilities to learn it quick. It is, not simply a piece of cake even for the person who has special skills, an individual can lack if they do not practice regularly. That is why someone said “PRACTICE MAKES A MAN PERFECT
Submitted by krunal6689 on Wed, 09/28/
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practice
for all to achieve a certain level.

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people
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that to be an artist is such easy as walking in the park. Yes,
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do daily exercise. By doing the
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in particular
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art
will give a tremendous success. From this point of view anyone can
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get
the attainment what they desire.

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who
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that to have a great triumph in
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art
, a person should have special abilities. An individual with such abilities does not require, such rehearse as normal do. They have a unique vision to approach for the particular laurel. They can
easily
grab each
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detail,
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where as
normal’s cannot do.
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, a person
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is hardworking and do regular
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success,
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at a certain level, he might lack. Where
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will have no worry,
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, last
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is something, which requires
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a lots
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skills
,
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practice
as well
as the abilities to learn it quick. It is, not
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who
has special
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, an individual can lack if they do not
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.
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why someone said
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“PRACTICE
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PERFECT
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that art (e. g painting, music, poetry) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can be only be made by those with special ability. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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