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Some people say that art(e. g. painting, music, poetry) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can only be made by those with special ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that art(e. g. painting, music, poetry) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can only be made by those with special ability. v. 1
While a vast majority of people believe that there is no need for any extraordinary ability to perform artistic work, such as painting and music, others claim that only the individuals with an inborn talent are suitable for this task. This essay intends to delve into both sides of the argument in depth. I, however, think that a determined person can perform any work with the help of appropriate training. To commence with, the advocates of the statement argue that work that is based on the art can be done by any individual. Because they might opine that there are the skills which anyone can learn with some sort of dedication and hard work. Since all these creative works require the use of the cognitive skills and these may be developed with the consistent efforts and practice. For instance, Salman Khan was not a painter by birth instead he has enhanced his ability, and nowadays painting is his favourite leisure time activity. What is more, famous singer, Neha Kakkar is not from a musical background rather she has struggled to achieve this name and fame. Therefore, it would not be wrong to say that perfection over various forms of art can be acquired by practicing. On the other hand, there are others who favour that innate abilities are most significant to become a successful artist despite being numerous example of famous people who achieve success not because of their hidden talents. This is due to the fact that all the people are not always ready to put their best efforts and they consider themselves a failure. So it becomes quite essential that an individual should have some different capabilities. For example, the queen of singing world, Lata Mangeshkar was born with a melodious sound, and it helped her a lot in attaining the popularity among the audience. To elucidate, although it is true that individuals with inherent traits do excel in the art world, it cannot be denied that hard work of a person wins at the end. In conclusion, undeniably, our society is divided on the issue of the better performer of the art related work. Some consider it is an easy task for the whole community, whereas others put the emphasis on the inborn talent. I opine that the only need to achieve victory over certain form of art is the strong determination.
While a vast majority of
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people
believe that there is no need for any extraordinary ability to perform artistic
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work
, such as painting and music, others claim that
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only
the
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individuals
with an inborn talent are suitable for this task. This essay intends to delve into both sides of the argument in depth. I,
however
,
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think
that a determined person can perform any
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work
with the
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help
of appropriate training.

To commence with, the advocates of the statement argue that
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work
that
is based
on the
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art
can
be done
by any
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individual
.
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Because
they might opine that there are the
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skills
which anyone can learn with
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some
sort of dedication and
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hard
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work
. Since all these creative works require the
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use
of the cognitive
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skills
and these may
be developed
with the consistent efforts and practice.
For instance
, Salman Khan was not a painter by birth
instead
he has enhanced his ability, and nowadays painting is his
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favourite
leisure time activity.
What is more
,
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famous
singer,
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Neha
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Kakkar
is not from a musical background
rather
she has struggled to achieve this name and fame.
Therefore
, it would not be
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wrong
to say that perfection over various forms of
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art
can
be acquired
by practicing.

On the
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other
hand, there are others who
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favour
that innate abilities are most significant to become a successful artist despite being numerous example of
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famous
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people
who achieve success not
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because
of their hidden talents.
This is due to the fact that
all the
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people
are not always ready to put their best
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efforts and
they consider themselves a failure.
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So
it becomes quite essential that an
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individual
should have
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some
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different
capabilities.
For example
, the queen of singing world,
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Lata
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Mangeshkar
was born
with a melodious sound, and it
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helped
her a lot in attaining the popularity among the audience. To elucidate, although it is true that
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individuals
with inherent traits do excel in the
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art
world, it cannot
be denied
that
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hard
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work
of a person wins at the
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end
.

In conclusion
,
undeniably
, our society
is divided
on the issue of the better performer of the
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art
related
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work
.
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Some
consider it is an easy task for the whole community, whereas others put the emphasis on the inborn talent. I opine that the
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only
need to achieve victory over certain form of
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art
is the strong determination.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
Flora Lewis

IELTS essay Some people say that art(e. g. painting, music, poetry) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can only be made by those with special ability. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
395 words
8.5
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