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Some people say that art (e. g. painting, music, poetry. . . )can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can only be made by those with special ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people say that art (e. g. painting, music, poetry. . . )can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can only be made by those with special ability. v. 3
Some experts opine that only god gifted has ability to perform the art, while, others believe that anybody can do this. I believe if a person is determined and focus they can do these activities. This essay will discuss both the arguments in details. Firstly, some people have special talents for extra curriculum activities like musics, painting and poetry and have been successful too. This is because, if they have will to do and be confident, one can stop achieving goals in their life, just need to be concentrate what they want in their life. For example, In Bollywood movies, I can see that actor or actress as well as acting in movies, they have passion for sings as well. Therefore, moving forward with their passion, hobbies and practise anyone can reach their destination. In other side, it said that specific ability can only perform those kind activities. It sounds true as well because, some of them try several times to become musically but fails. This is because, they are not meant for that field. For instance, top singer of Bollywood Lata Magewshor, everybody believes she is god gifted with singing, however, she is not meant for playing cricket. Hence, individual need to know their ability and skills and engaged in an activity that makes them feel satisfied and happy. In conclusion, it is difficult to strongly agree with one statement because individuals have been successful in those activities even though their career is different. So, it all depends on how much one can put effort and fulfil their dreams.
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experts opine that
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only
god gifted has ability to perform the art, while, others believe that anybody can do this. I believe if a person
is determined
and focus they can do these
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activities
. This essay will discuss both the arguments in
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details
.

Firstly
,
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some
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people
have special talents for extra curriculum
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activities
like musics, painting and poetry and have been successful too. This is
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because
, if they have will to do and be confident, one can
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stop
achieving goals in their life,
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just
need to be concentrate what they want in their life.
For example
, In Bollywood movies, I can
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see
that actor or actress
as well
as acting in movies, they have passion for sings
as well
.
Therefore
, moving forward with their passion, hobbies and
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practise
anyone can reach their destination.

In other side, it said that specific ability can
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only
perform those kind
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activities
. It sounds true
as well
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because
,
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some
of them try several times to become
musically
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but
fails. This is
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because
, they are not meant for that field.
For instance
, top singer of Bollywood
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Lata
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Magewshor
, everybody believes she is god gifted with singing,
however
, she is not meant for playing cricket.
Hence
, individual need to know their ability and
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skills
and engaged in an
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activity
that
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makes
them feel satisfied and happy.

In conclusion
, it is difficult to
strongly
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agree
with one statement
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because
individuals have been successful in those
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activities
even though
their career is
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different
.
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So
, it all depends on how much one can put effort and fulfil their dreams.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that art (e. g. painting, music, poetry. . . )can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can only be made by those with special ability. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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