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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.12

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? v. 12
In the past, the concept of the Advertising is not so common. In those days, It was noticed that the people were not aware about advertisement. Those days, people were not purchasing product from the advertisement but they were purchased product what they liked and what they need. However, at present, the table has turned. Currently, it is noticed that most of people are buying product only after seeing the advertisement. After watching the advertisement, some people thinks to buy product but they do not understand whether it is necessary or it helps to improve people's lives. There are controversial views prevailing in this matter whether advertising encourage to buy things what really people need or not. Keeping in consideration existing trends for and against in this matter. I completely do not accede to the idea. One of the most convincing reason I have in this regard is that advertising is just manipulating human mind. My belief is due to my observation that advertisement encourages the people to buy product for sowing their only advantages of product. As a result, people just buy that product from the advertisement which is really unnecessary for them. They are purchasing because they think it will work as it shown in the advertisement. For instance, In most of the literate society, it has been a usual perception that one of the advertisement showing that if people collect their chocolate raper and save it, people will go in future. After that, people are buying that chocolate because they thinking its real. Additionally, my inclination is supported by the axiom that children can demand specific product after watching the broadcast which is really unnecessary for them. As a matter of fact, they are becoming very demanding. Consequently, If parents want allow to buy them, they will be coming stubborn and angry. I can cite an example for this. A recent survey by a reputed International organisation in this matter has reveled a surprising testimony that about 89% children are purchasing product of food and toys because of advertisement influences. In a nutshell, everyone from civilized societies should realize that it is vital to know that how much propaganda negatively affecting the child's mind and influencing them to purchase particular product which will affect the future of the human beings. In the foreseeable future, we cannot deny that people will buy merchandise that they really don't need to improve their lifestyle but they just buying because they seeing that product ad they feels they need it which is a waste of money.
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common. In those days, It
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people
were not aware about
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advertisement
. Those days,
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people
were not purchasing
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product
from the
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advertisement
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but
they were
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purchased
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product
what they liked and what they
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need
.
However
, at present, the table has turned.
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, it
is noticed
that most of
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people
are buying
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product
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only
after seeing the
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. After watching the
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,
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some
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people
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thinks
to
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buy
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product
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but
they do not understand whether it is necessary or it
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helps
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improve
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people
's
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lives
. There are controversial views prevailing in this
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matter
whether advertising encourage to
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buy
things what
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really
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people
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need
or not. Keeping in consideration existing trends for and against in this
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matter
. I completely do not accede to the
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idea
.

One of the most convincing reason I have in this regard is that advertising is
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just
manipulating human mind. My belief is due to my observation that
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advertisement
encourages the
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people
to
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buy
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product
for sowing their
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only
advantages of
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product
.
As a result
,
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people
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just
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buy
that
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product
from the
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advertisement
which is
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really
unnecessary for them. They are purchasing
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because
they
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think
it will work as it shown in the
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advertisement
.
For instance
, In most of the literate society, it has been a usual perception that one of the
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advertisement
showing that if
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people
collect their chocolate raper and save it,
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people
will go
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in future
. After that,
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people
are buying that chocolate
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because
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they thinking
its real.

Additionally
, my inclination
is supported
by the axiom that children can demand specific
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product
after watching the broadcast which is
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really
unnecessary for them. As a
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matter
of fact, they are becoming
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very
demanding.
Consequently
, If parents want
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allow
to
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buy
them, they will be coming stubborn and angry. I can cite an example for this. A recent survey by a reputed International
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organisation
in this
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matter
has reveled a surprising testimony that about 89% children are purchasing
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product
of food and toys
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because
of
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advertisement
influences.

In a nutshell, everyone from civilized societies should realize that it is vital to know that how much propaganda
negatively
affecting the child's mind and influencing them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
particular
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product
which will affect the future of the human beings. In the foreseeable future, we cannot deny that
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people
will
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buy
merchandise that they
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really
don't
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need
to
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improve
their lifestyle
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but
they
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just
buying
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because
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they seeing
that
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product
ad they
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feels
they
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need
it which is a waste of money.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
425 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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