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Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.15

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? v. 15
It is thought by some people that advertising motivated us to purchase different products that are not required. While others think that adverts are methods for products to be known and recognized, which help to improve our lives. In my opinion, I am on par with the latter view that advertisements are very necessary and affect our lives very well; nevertheless, some drawbacks can be noticed. Firstly, advertisements and propaganda used by sales departments in companies or by sponsors in TV shows can contribute significantly to the introduction of goods, products, and services to us, which in turn, result in free opting between different options for what we need anytime and anywhere. Moreover, adverts can be the key factors influencing successful sales rates and the neediest among various services for the same products. For instance, all customers can reap many benefits of cell phones services introduced by different companies; people can know the best choice from adverts to select the most advantageous. On the other hand, some people see advertisements as a consuming material, which presents products in an unreal and shiny image, which is ambiguous to others. In addition, they believe that many adverts can misrepresent the truth behind the products and mislead people. Many people argued that these kinds of adverts considerably increase the number of lavish persons who spend too much money in an exaggerating way. And turn them. Particularly, the youngsters to valueless characters where they seek only the most modernized products. In conclusion, advertisements are markedly indispensable in society, which enable us to know what is beneficial between different pieces of stuff. But some precautions should be taken into consideration as censorship and auditing for high quality is required.
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some
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people
that advertising motivated us to
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purchase
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different
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products
that are not required. While others
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think
that adverts are methods for
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products
to
be known
and recognized, which
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help
to
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improve
our
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lives
. In my opinion, I am on par with the latter view that
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advertisements
are
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very
necessary and affect our
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lives
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very
well;
nevertheless
,
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some
drawbacks can
be noticed
.

Firstly
,
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advertisements
and propaganda
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used
by sales departments in
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companies
or by sponsors in TV
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shows
can contribute
significantly
to the introduction of
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goods
,
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products
, and services to us, which in turn, result in free opting between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
options for what we need anytime and anywhere.
Moreover
, adverts can be the key factors influencing successful sales rates and the neediest among various services for the same
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products
.
For instance
, all customers can reap
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many
benefits of cell phones services introduced by
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different
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companies
;
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people
can know the best choice from adverts to select the most advantageous.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
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see
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advertisements
as a consuming material, which presents
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products
in an unreal and shiny image, which is ambiguous to others.
In addition
, they believe that
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many
adverts can misrepresent the truth behind the
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products
and mislead
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people
.
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Many
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people
argued that these kinds of adverts
considerably
increase the number of lavish persons who spend too much money in an exaggerating way. And turn them.
Particularly
, the youngsters to valueless characters where they seek
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only
the most modernized products.

In conclusion
,
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advertisements
are
markedly
indispensable in society, which enable us to know what is beneficial between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
pieces of stuff.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
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some
precautions should
be taken
into consideration as censorship and auditing for high quality
is required
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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