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Some people say that a person s success is as a result of the way he has been brought up by his parents Do you agree or disagree v.1

Some people say that a person s success is as a result of the way he has been brought up by his parents v. 1
It is certain that more and more people like watching foreign movies instead of domestic movies, there are several reasons why people tend to be this. In my opinion, I completely agree that the authorities should help local film industries improve budget resource to take film quality There is a tendency for people to like watching foreign films rather than domestically produced film, due to some causes. Firstly, one of the best reasons to watch foreign movies is that special in quality visual and technical. Obviously, developed countries such as Europe areas have a great film industry. To illustrate, Avengers and Avatar movies bring about dramatic cinematic effects and attraction for viewers. Secondly, watching foreign films bring a great deal of opportunities to pick up another language skill. For instance, English movies allow people to pick up new words, and people can also develop the sound of language. The government should give more financial for improving domestic film industries, because of several reasons. To begin with, economic benefit plays a vital role in developing domestic movie industries; therefor, the local film industries need the authorities’ support. For example, if films have invested with a plenty of money, movie director can purchase model equipment for enhancing the highest video quality. Another reason, the growth of domestic film industries contributes expansion of tourism industries. For example, the movies were filmed in Ninh Binh with beautiful images of the landscape, it interests in a large number of travellers. In conclusion, there are many people choose to watch foreign movies rather than domestic movies because it has sophisticated technology and people can learn a new language. In my opinion, local film industries have financial support from the government in order to be successful.
It is certain that more and more
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people
like watching
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foreign
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movies
instead
of
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domestic
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movies
, there are several
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reasons
why
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people
tend to be this. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
that the authorities should
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help
local film
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industries
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improve
budget resource to take film
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quality


There is a tendency for
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people
to like watching
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foreign
films
rather
than
domestically
produced film, due to
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some
causes.
Firstly
, one of the best
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reasons
to
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watch
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foreign
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movies
is that special in quality visual and technical.
Obviously
,
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developed countries
such as Europe areas have a great film
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industry
. To illustrate, Avengers and Avatar
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movies
bring about dramatic cinematic effects and attraction for viewers.
Secondly
, watching
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foreign
films bring a great deal of opportunities to pick up another language
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skill
.
For instance
, English
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movies
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allow
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people
to pick up new words, and
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people
can
also
develop the sound of language.

The
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government
should give more financial for improving
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domestic
film
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industries
,
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because
of several
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reasons
. To
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begin
with, economic benefit plays a vital role in developing
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domestic
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movie
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industries
; therefor, the local film
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industries
need the authorities’ support.
For example
, if films have invested with a
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plenty
of money,
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movie
director can
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purchase
model equipment for enhancing the highest video quality. Another
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reason
, the growth of
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domestic
film
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industries
contributes expansion of tourism
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industries
.
For example
, the
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movies
were filmed
in
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Ninh
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Binh
with
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beautiful
images of the landscape, it interests in
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a large number of
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travellers
.

In conclusion
, there are
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many
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people
choose to
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watch
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foreign
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movies
rather
than
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domestic
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movies
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because
it has sophisticated technology and
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people
can learn a new language. In my opinion, local film
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industries
have financial support from the
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government
in order to be successful.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Language is not a genetic gift, it is a social gift. Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay Some people say that a person s success is as a result of the way he has been brought up by his parents v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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