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Some people say it is manufactures and supermarkets responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of products they sell and others say it is the consumers responsibility to avoid buying products with too much packaging. Discuss both views and give your v.2

Some people say it is manufactures and supermarkets responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of products they sell and others say it is the consumers responsibility to avoid buying products with too much packaging. 2
It is argued by a few people that food packed in multiple layers should be rejected by the consumers. However, some people say that the number of packaging on a product should be regulated by the shop owners and manufacturers. In my opinion, the production houses and the mart owners are responsible to maintain the standard packaging which is listed by a government. In today' s world, people like fresh packed food. To make this happen, companies are wrapping them in layers of packaging which allows keeping food fresh. Moreover, they also add it to protect it from any damage that might be possible while transporting. It will also make easy for the supermarket to store it for a longer span. Applying more packaging aids to prevent from spoiling. According to new research by FDI, by increasing the packing on the product can raise the freshness by 3 times. But it also increases the cost of the product which directly hampers the customer' s budget. It is believed that packing can cost up to 50% of the product M. R. P. While producers are on run to double the covering of eatables items to ensure the quality although it is crucial for them to suppress the amount of money raised on the product. for example, if the milk producer increases the price, the consumer can' t just stop buying it because it is there basic need. So, supermarkets and creator of the products should reduce the amount of packaging. More packing means more space, so every product will need more space and demand to extra space and if it will lift up the capital cost. In conclusion, Buyers can' t stop purchasing the products which they need to regular basis. It is the manufactures and the supermarket who should avoid a large number of packing on each product. And improve the process of using expired products because food packed for a longer period of time can be harmful to us.
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is argued
by a few
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people
that
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food
packed in multiple layers should
be rejected
by the consumers.
However
,
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some
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people
say that the number of
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packaging
on a
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product
should
be regulated
by the shop owners and manufacturers. In my opinion, the production
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houses
and the mart owners are responsible to maintain the standard
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packaging
which
is listed
by a
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government
.

In
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today&
#039; s world,
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people
like fresh packed
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food
. To
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make
this happen,
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companies
are wrapping them in layers of
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packaging
which
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allows
keeping
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food
fresh.
Moreover
, they
also
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add
it to protect it from any damage that might be possible while transporting. It will
also
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make
easy for the supermarket to store it for a longer span. Applying more
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packaging
aids to
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prevent
from spoiling. According to new research by FDI, by increasing the
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packing
on the
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product
can raise the freshness by 3 times.
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But
it
also
increases the cost of the
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product
which
directly
hampers the
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customer&
#039; s budget.

It
is believed
that
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packing
can cost up to 50% of the
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product
M. R. P. While producers are on run to double the covering of eatables items to ensure the quality although it is crucial for them to suppress the amount of money raised on the
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product
.
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for
example, if the milk producer increases the price, the consumer
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can&
#039; t
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just
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stop
buying it
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because
it is there basic need.
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So
, supermarkets and creator of the
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products
should
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reduce
the amount of
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packaging
. More
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packing
means more space,
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so
every
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product
will need more space and demand to extra space and if it will
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lift up
the capital cost.

In conclusion
, Buyers
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can&
#039; t
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stop
purchasing the
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products
which they need to regular basis. It is the manufactures and the supermarket who should avoid
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a large number of
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packing
on each
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product
. And
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improve
the process of using expired
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products
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because
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food
packed for a longer period of time can be harmful to us.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say it is manufactures and supermarkets responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of products they sell and others say it is the consumers responsibility to avoid buying products with too much packaging. 2

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  American English
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330 words
6.0
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