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You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months. • v.9

You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months. • v. 9
Dear Smith, The purpose of writing this letter is to express my willingness to work in the head office in Auckland, New Zealand for the next six months. As you are aware that I am doing MBA to enhance my management skills for my present job. As a requirement of the course, I need to attend the training module in Auckland during weekends for a period of 6 months. At present, I am occupied with only two projects and fortunately one the client is also from New Zealand. I will have an opportunity to meet the owner and try to grab a few more projects from them. The other project is an internal one which can be handled by Rauf as he agreed to help me. I request you to kindly allow me to work there and make necessary arrangements with head office for a smooth transition. This is a good opportunity for me to bring more business to the company and this training will improve my caliber which in turn will be beneficial for the company. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jack Ryan
Dear Smith,

The purpose of writing this letter is to express my willingness to work in the head office in Auckland, New Zealand for the
next
six months.

As you are aware that I am doing MBA to enhance my management
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
for my present job. As a requirement of the course, I need to attend the training module in Auckland during weekends for a period of 6 months.

At present, I
am occupied
with
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only
two projects and
fortunately
one the client is
also
from New Zealand. I will have an opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the owner and try to grab a few more projects from them.

The other project is an internal one which can
be handled
by
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Rauf
as he
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agreed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me.

I request you to kindly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to work there and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
necessary arrangements with head office for a smooth transition. This is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
opportunity for me to bring more business to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and this training will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
my caliber which in turn will be beneficial for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jack Ryan
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months. • v. 9

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
187 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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