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You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months. • v.9

You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months. • v. 9

Dear Smith, The purpose of writing this letter is to express my willingness to work in the head office in Auckland, New Zealand for the next six months. As you are aware that I am doing MBA to enhance my management skills for my present job. As a requirement of the course, I need to attend the training module in Auckland during weekends for a period of 6 months. At present, I am occupied with only two projects and fortunately one the client is also from New Zealand. I will have an opportunity to meet the owner and try to grab a few more projects from them. The other project is an internal one which can be handled by Rauf as he agreed to help me. I request you to kindly allow me to work there and make necessary arrangements with head office for a smooth transition. This is a good opportunity for me to bring more business to the company and this training will improve my caliber which in turn will be beneficial for the company. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jack Ryan

Dear Smith,

The purpose of writing this letter is to express my willingness to work in the head office in Auckland, New Zealand for the next
 six months.

As you are aware that I am doing MBA to enhance my management This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
 for my present job. As a requirement of the course, I need to attend the training module in Auckland during weekends for a period of 6 months.

At present, I am occupied
 with This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 two projects and fortunately
 one the client is also
 from New Zealand. I will have an opportunity to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 the owner and try to grab a few more projects from them.

The other project is an internal one which can be handled
 by Possible spelling mistake found.RAAFRaulRAFAUFRUFRalf
Rauf
 as he This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesced
agreed
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 me.

I request you to kindly This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 me to work there and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 necessary arrangements with head office for a smooth transition. This is a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 opportunity for me to bring more business to the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 and this training will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 my caliber which in turn will be beneficial for the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully
,

Jack Ryan

2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months. • v. 9

Essay

American English

9 paragraphs

187 words

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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 6.0

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Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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