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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this? v.3

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this? v. 3
I strongly believe that it is important to keep your house and working space organized. From my experience, not only it improves your efficiency, but it also helps you become more productive and less stressed. Humans are a creature of habit and our brain are trained to simplify numerous tasks. Meaning, the reason why you cannot find the other pair of socks is because it is never in the same place and your brain failed to organize that information for you. By keeping it neat, your brain will be able to learn and makes it easier and faster for you to find your items. Organizing your space also allows you to be more productive with your work. I have noticed that when I have a tidy work area, I feel more at peace and able to focus on my tasks for a longer period of time. However, this might not be true for everyone. Some individuals like to have an "organized mess" where they leave items all over their place hoping to come back for it later when they need to complete their work. Unfortunately, this does not work for me at all. In conclusion, I prefer to keep my living and work space neat because it works for me and helps me improve my productivity and efficiency. It allows my brain to keep all their power for important executive decisions such as working on a project or assignment.
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helps
you become more productive and less
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.

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brain
are trained
to simplify numerous tasks. Meaning, the reason why you cannot find the other pair of socks is
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because
it is never in the same place and your
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brain
failed to organize that information for you. By keeping it neat, your
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brain
will be able to learn and
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makes
it easier and faster for you to find your items.

Organizing your space
also
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allows
you to be more productive with your
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work
. I have noticed that when I have a tidy
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work
area, I feel more at peace and able to focus on my tasks for a longer period of time.
However
, this might not be true for everyone.
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Some
individuals like to have an
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organized mess
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where they
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leave
items all over their place hoping to
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come
back for it later when they need to complete their
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work
. Unfortunately, this does not
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work
for me at all.

In conclusion
, I prefer to
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keep
my living and
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work
space neat
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because
it works for me and
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helps
me
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improve
my productivity and efficiency. It
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allows
my
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brain
to
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keep
all their power for
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important
executive decisions such as working on a project or assignment.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
239 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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