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Some people say it is important keep your home and your workplace tidy, with organized everything and on a correct place. What is your opinion about this? v.1

Some people say it is important keep your home and your workplace tidy, with organized everything and on a correct place. What is your opinion about this? v. 1
Many humans believe that by keeping your things organised and your belongings in place along with cleanliness play a crucial role in your home and at the workplace too. In the following essay, we will be discussing the benefits of a tidy surroundings and a systematic arrangement of the assets one has. First of all, let's discuss about the impact one gets by keeping their home and workplace clean. Cleanliness helps you to improve and manage a healthy lifestyle. Similar practice benefits you in several ways from keeping you active to a clean environment and gives you a positive vibe too. For an example, if someone is in a habit to keep their house and things clean, later it does not only make them active, but keeps them away from several diseases related to respiratory track which occurs due to dust. Moreover, we will discuss about organising things and keeping in the respective place. Organised items make your life much easier and convenient. Organised things give you an organised lifestyle and a life free of stress, it saves one's time and keeps the mind relaxed. For an instance, when you come back from your office and keep your bag, shoes and documents in place, subsequently the other morning you will not have to get stressed by panicking while searching for the mandatory items. In conclusion, I would like to say that I completely agree with the thought of keeping your ambience, clean and well organised because it ultimately benefits us as a human. We all want a clean, healthy and stress free life to stay happy and to live freely.
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and your belongings in place along with cleanliness play a crucial role in your home and at the workplace too. In the following essay, we will be discussing the benefits of a tidy surroundings and a systematic arrangement of the assets one has.

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,
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impact one
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by keeping their home and workplace
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clean
. Cleanliness
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helps
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improve
and manage a healthy lifestyle. Similar practice benefits you in several ways from keeping you active to a
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clean
environment and gives you a
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positive
vibe too. For an example, if someone is in a habit to
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keep
their
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house
and things
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, later it does not
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them active,
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them away from several diseases related to respiratory
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which occurs due to dust.

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things and keeping in the respective place.
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items
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your life much easier and convenient.
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things give you an
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lifestyle and a life free of
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, it saves one's time and
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keeps
the mind relaxed. For an instance, when you
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back from your office and
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your bag, shoes and documents in place,
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the other morning you will not
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stressed
by panicking while searching for the mandatory items.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that I completely
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agree
with the
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thought
of keeping your ambience,
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clean
and well
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organised
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because
it
ultimately
benefits us as a human. We all want a
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, healthy and
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free life to stay happy and to
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freely
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IELTS essay Some people say it is important keep your home and your workplace tidy, with organized everything and on a correct place. What is your opinion about this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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