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advertising is influencing people more and more. is this a positive or a negative trend? v. 2

It is a known fact that most of our decisions these days are based on the advertisements we see. I strongly feel, it is more bad that good. It is definitely a negative trend that has dangerous implications Firstly, not everything said in an advertising is true. Even though, laws exist to ensure that advertisements are right and ethical, marketers always find a loophole in it. For example, a lot of fairness cream ads claim to make you fair but it is scientifically proven that melanin once in your skin, cannot be removed and technically you can't get considerable fairness. A lot of products use these factually incorrect claims to lure users and people fall prey to it, all the time In addition, from lying, advertising is a money driven process. Which means, an advertiser with the most money gets the most space and time. This makes the competition unfair and consumers are not exposed to the financially weaker products. Another example would be an organization like Amazon can take up an entire page in the newspaper, whereas smaller retailers can't afford it, even if they have better products and offers. To summarise, cash-driven monopolistic approach doesn't let the market stay fair. In conclusion, lack of ethics and fairness are the two major attributes of advertising. Thereby, making the trend of being inspired by those, a negative one.

IELTS essay advertising is influencing people more and more. is this a positive or a negative trend? v.2

It is a known fact that most of our decisions these days
are based
on the advertisements we
see
. I
strongly
feel, it is more
bad
that
good
. It is definitely a
negative
trend that has
dangerous
implications


Firstly
, not everything said in an advertising is true.
Even though
, laws exist to ensure that advertisements are right and ethical, marketers always find a loophole in it.
For example
,
a lot of
fairness cream ads claim to
make
you
fair
but
it is
scientifically
proven that melanin once in your skin, cannot
be removed
and
technically
you can't
get
considerable fairness.
A lot of
products
use
these
factually
incorrect claims to lure users and
people
fall prey to it, all the
time


In addition
, from lying, advertising is a money driven process. Which means, an advertiser with the most money
gets
the most space and time. This
makes
the competition unfair and consumers are not exposed to the
financially
weaker products. Another example would be an organization like Amazon can take up an entire page in the newspaper, whereas smaller retailers can't afford it, even if they have better products and offers. To
summarise
, cash-driven monopolistic approach doesn't
let
the market stay
fair
.

In conclusion
, lack of ethics and fairness are the two major attributes of advertising. Thereby, making the trend of
being inspired
by those, a
negative
one.
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0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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