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some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. what is your opinion about this? v.6

some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. what is your opinion about this? v. 6
It is very important to keep our home or workplace tidy and organised because those are the places where we live and we work. Keeping home and office in a organised manner gives a very pleasant feeling which makes you more energetic and helps you to focus more on work. If nothing is organised we can't concentrate on our work, it gives you a very odd feeling. In our lives cleanness is a mandatory thing to be happy and healthy. Poor hygiene can affect our family in a very hard way. It can make you sick and vulnerable to many diseases. Most of the health issues can be prevented if we keep our house or workplace tidy. We have to be more careful when it comes to the workplace, because we meet a number of people there, and it can be more unpleasant if it is not clean. Every place where we live should be organised because it makes our work easy. If we keep everything in their designated places it will save our time, because next time when you need it you no need search for it. In lot offices there are designated places for every working tool which gives employees a clear idea very to go when we need it and it should be done in every house as well. Just imagine if everything is not organised and it is not tidy in our house and workplace, it will be disgusting and very hard to work. It also makes people sick, to avoid this and to be happy I strongly support to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.
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our home or
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tidy
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organised
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because
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places
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live and
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work
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organised
manner gives a
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very
pleasant feeling which
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makes
you more energetic and
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helps
you to focus more on
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work
. If nothing is
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organised
we can't concentrate on our
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work
, it gives you a
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very
odd feeling.

In our
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lives
cleanness is a mandatory thing to be happy and healthy. Poor hygiene can affect our family in a
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very
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hard
way. It can
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make
you sick and vulnerable to
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many
diseases. Most of the health issues can be
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prevented
if we
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our
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house
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. We
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have to
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,
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we
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meet
a number of
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there, and it can be more unpleasant if it is not clean.

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should be
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organised
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easy. If we
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everything in their designated
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places
it will save our time,
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because
next
time when you need it you no need search for it.

In lot offices there
are designated
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places
for every working tool which gives employees a
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clear
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idea
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to go when we need it and it should
be done
in every
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as well
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imagine if everything is not
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organised
and it is not
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tidy
in our
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house
and
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workplace
, it will be disgusting and
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also
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makes
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people
sick, to avoid this and to be happy I
strongly
support to
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keep
your home and your
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workplace
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tidy
, with everything
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organised
and in the correct
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place
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. what is your opinion about this? v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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