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Some people say it is a waste of time when you plan for the future. It is more important to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say it is a waste of time when you plan for the future. It is more important to focus on the present. v. 1
The debate that we should focus on the present or the future is an everlasting one. Although some people think that planning is the key to a successful life, others argue that we should only focus on the present without worrying about the future. I personally believe that planning makes it easier for people to channelize their energy, resources, mind, and efforts to achieve their goal. Most people around the world, with a few exceptions, envision a decent, peaceful, and luxurious life. Even though planning is a time-consuming and a tedious process, it is important to plan in order to achieve a goal. The planning strategy also depends on the goal. For long term career goals, it is important that the planning starts when the kid is in still in school. It helps the child identify the sequence of steps that must be followed to achieve the goal. It aids to organize thoughts, develop skills, and enhance motivation. For instance, Aisha wanted to be a police officer. Since her goal was clear, she went to a counsellor who advised her to read textbooks and focus on current affairs needed to qualify the exam. Following the guidance, Aisha streamlined her efforts and qualified the exam in her first attempt. On the other hand, John, who was also an aspiring police officer, went to the same counsellor for advice. Although he had a brilliant academic record, he did not execute the plan suggested by the counsellor and failed to qualify the exam. These examples, therefore emphasize the importance of career planning. In addition to long-term goals, planning also plays a strategic role when it comes to achieving short term daily, weekly, or monthly targets. For example, John is a business development executive who has been tasked to achieve a 20 % increase in their sales by the end of the month. In order to achieve his target, he planned his day-to-day activities which made it easier for him to manage his time, focus on important matters, and consequently achieve the necessary goal. As highlighted above through these illustrations, planning is a key ingredient for both long-term and short-term goals and is mandatory for those who want to lead a successful life.
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on the present or the future is an everlasting one. Although
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people
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think
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is the key to a successful life, others argue that we should
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only
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focus
on the present without worrying about the future. I
personally
believe that
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planning
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makes
it easier for
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people
to channelize their energy, resources, mind, and efforts to
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achieve
their goal.

Most
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people
around the world, with a few exceptions, envision a decent, peaceful, and luxurious life.

Even though
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planning
is a time-consuming and a tedious process, it is
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important
to plan in order to
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achieve
a
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goal
. The
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planning
strategy
also
depends on the
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goal
. For long term career
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goals
, it is
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important
that the
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planning
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starts
when the kid is in
still
in school. It
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helps
the child identify the sequence of steps that
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must
be followed
to
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achieve
the
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goal
. It aids to organize thoughts, develop
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skills
, and enhance motivation.

For instance
, Aisha wanted to be a police officer. Since her
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goal
was
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clear
, she went to a
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counsellor
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who
advised her to read textbooks and
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focus
on
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current
affairs needed to qualify the exam. Following the guidance, Aisha streamlined her efforts and qualified the exam in her
first
attempt.

On the other hand
, John,
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who
was
also
an aspiring police officer, went to the same
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counsellor
for advice. Although he had a brilliant academic record, he did not execute the plan suggested by the
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counsellor
and failed to qualify the exam. These examples,
therefore
emphasize the importance of career planning.

In addition
to long-term
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goals
,
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planning
also
plays a strategic role when it
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comes
to achieving short term daily, weekly, or monthly targets.
For example
, John is a business development executive
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who
has
been tasked
to
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achieve
a 20 % increase in their sales by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the month. In order to
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achieve
his target, he planned his day-to-day activities which made it easier for him to manage his time,
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focus
on
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important
matters, and
consequently
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achieve
the necessary goal.

As highlighted above through these illustrations,
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planning
is a key ingredient for both long-term and short-term
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goals
and is mandatory for those
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who
want to lead a successful life.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say it is a waste of time when you plan for the future. It is more important to focus on the present. v. 1

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
369 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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