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Some people say that it is a waste of time to plan for the future and that it is more important to focus on the present. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that it is a waste of time to plan for the future and that it is more important to focus on the present. v. 1
There are some debates about whether people should plan for the future or focus on the presents. In my opinion, while I agree that pay attention to the present is crucial, I disagree that planning for the future is a waste of time. On the one hand, presents play an important role in human life. Firstly, people can only control the moments in presents. For example, opportunities always come without notice, so people can only catch the chance if they know how to deal with it. Hence, people could become successful if they can handle the problem in the present. Secondly, each moment in presents is inestimated such as the time that people stay with their family, the time they hang out with friends. All of that time happened in presents and how much they laugh, happy is priceless. As a result, present is essential that people need to focus on. On the other hand, planning for the future is worth. Firstly, making plans for the future helps people understand their purpose in life. When people plan for their own future, they will be motivated to make their dreams come true. As a result, people will have a goal to reach and they will always try to achieve their success. Secondly, planning for the future allows people to get closer to their goals. For example, a man wants to save money to buy a new car, he has to think about how much money he has to save each month and how long will he buy it. As a result, after a long time, he is able to buy a new car, which he could not do without planning, a man will never save enough money for his purpose. To sum up, while people pay more attention to the present, I believe that they should spent time to plan for the future.
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debates about whether
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for the
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or focus on the
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. In my opinion, while I
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agree
that pay attention to the
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is crucial, I disagree that
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planning
for the
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future
is a waste of time.

On the one hand,
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presents
play an
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important
role in human life.
Firstly
,
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people
can
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only
control the moments in
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presents
.
For example
, opportunities always
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come
without notice,
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so
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people
can
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only
catch the chance if they know how to deal with it.
Hence
,
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people
could become successful if they can handle the problem in the
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present
.
Secondly
, each moment in
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presents
is
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inestimated
such as the
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time
that
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people
stay with their family, the
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time
they hang out with friends. All of that
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time
happened in
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presents
and how much they laugh, happy is priceless.
As a result
,
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present
is essential that
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people
need to focus on.

On the other hand
,
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planning
for the
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future
is worth.
Firstly
, making
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plans
for the
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future
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helps
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people
understand their purpose in life. When
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people
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plan
for their
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own
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future
, they will
be motivated
to
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make
their dreams
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true.
As a result
,
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people
will have a goal to
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reach and
they will always try to achieve their success.
Secondly
,
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planning
for the
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future
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allows
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people
to
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get
closer to their goals.
For example
, a
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man
wants to save money to
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buy
a new car, he
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has to
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think
about how much money he
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has to
save each month and how long will he
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buy
it.
As a result
, after a long
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time
, he is able to
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buy
a new car, which he could not do without
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planning
, a
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man
will never save
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enough
money for his purpose.

To sum up, while
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people
pay more attention to the
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present
, I believe that they should
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spent
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time
to
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plan
for the
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future
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that it is a waste of time to plan for the future and that it is more important to focus on the present. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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