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Some people say it’s a waste of time when plan for future. It is more important to focus on present. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people say it’s a waste of time when plan for future. It is more important to focus on present. v. 2
People argue that it is mor important to pay attention on the present rather than spending unnecessary time planning for the future. Personally, I opposed this statement since planning is an essential part of everyday life. Planning contributes to success. An organized and outlines plan serves as a guide to come up with better result, thus a person with a good preparation has an edge to excel among others. A successful business, for example, prior to operate, the owner carefully developed a business plan specifically designed on how to promote and maintained a high-quality product that will satisfy the need of its costumer. As a result, it will gain more profit while preventing future loss or bankruptcy. Therefore, having a structured plan is considered as a valuable tool in the accomplishment of one’s goal. In addition, future is unpredictable, and a problem may arise anytime causing stress and wildly unthinking behavior for many. However, people who have a well-established plan for uncontrol circumstances such as health or economic crisis is far better prepare compare to those people who simply seize the moment without thinking for tomorrow. For instance, a family with a good financial plan is less worry on how to sustain their basic needs. On the other hand, those individuals who spend money like a one-day millionaire and fails to save for future used, are facing dilemma on how to survive and meet their necessities. To avoid this, future planning is the best way that everyone should practice. In conclusion, although living on the present and enjoying life to its fullest is vital, I believe that having a proper future plan is the most effective method to achieve objective and setting the right tract to success and handle unforeseen situation.
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People
argue that it is
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important
to pay attention on the present
rather
than spending unnecessary time planning for the
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future
.
Personally
, I opposed this statement since planning is an essential part of everyday life.

Planning contributes to success. An organized and outlines
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plan
serves as a guide to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with better result,
thus
a person with a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
preparation has an edge to excel among others. A successful business,
for example
, prior to operate, the owner
carefully
developed a business
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plan
specifically
designed on how to promote and maintained a high-quality product that will satisfy the need of its costumer.
As a result
, it will gain more profit while preventing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
loss or bankruptcy.
Therefore
, having a structured
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plan
is considered
as a valuable tool in the accomplishment of one’s goal.

In addition
,
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future
is unpredictable, and a problem may arise anytime causing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
and
wildly
unthinking behavior for
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many
.
However
,
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people
who have a well-established
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plan
for
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uncontrol
circumstances such as health or economic crisis is far better prepare compare to those
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
simply
seize the moment without thinking for tomorrow.
For instance
, a family with a
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good
financial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plan
is less worry on how to sustain their basic needs.
On the other hand
, those individuals who spend money like a one-day millionaire and fails to save for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
, are facing dilemma on how to survive and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
their necessities. To avoid this,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
planning is the best way that everyone should practice.

In conclusion
, although living on the present and enjoying life to its fullest is vital, I believe that having a proper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
future
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plan
is the most effective method to achieve objective and setting the right tract to success and handle unforeseen situation.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say it’s a waste of time when plan for future. It is more important to focus on present. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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