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Some people say it is a good idea for all employees to wear a uniform at work To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

Some people say it is a good idea for all employees to wear a uniform at work v. 2
Whether employees should follow a strict dress code and wear a uniform is a matter of heated discussion up to now. While some argue that wearing a uniform will give the impression of discipline and coordination in a workplace, others argue that wearing the same cloths, especially on a long run, could lead to unwanted psychological effects on employees. Although the former group suggests some valid points, I strongly believe that taking the staff’s feelings about their workplace is crucially important and should be the first priority of a company. Many corporations, especially the ones that receive clients on a daily basis, are fond of the idea of unique appearance and believe it would create a better picture of their company. Airlines, with their fancy and chic uniforms, are one of those workplaces that dictate dress code and they expect absolute conformity to it. As a result, female flight attendances usually complain about the fact that they are obliged to wear high-hill shoes or miniskirts for long working hours. Although some companies take their employees’ comfort into account while choosing a uniform, it is not the only challenge that staff are facing in such workplaces. We, human, are fond of changes and we dislike routines. People may not have always the option to change their job when they feel bored with the routines, but their appearance is one thing that they should be free to make decisions about. Having a day-in-day-out job can be frustrating to many and wearing the same clothes to work every day, undoubtedly, can contribute to minor depressions. A study documented that while choosing a job, both male and female staff, rather look for workplaces that give them the freedom of appearance and they have stated that between an equally good job offers, they will choose the one that would not dictate any sort of dress code. Some workplaces such as hospitals have no choice but to define some dress code so patients and clients would know the role each employee is playing in the system. There is no workaround in such workplaces, yet, it is still plausible to have employee’s best interest in mind and consider their satisfaction and comfort when choosing a uniform; As otherwise, no matter how beautifully the staff are dressed, they would not function in a coordinated and disciplinary manner.
Whether
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employees
should follow a strict
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dress
code and wear a
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uniform
is a matter of heated discussion up to
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now
. While
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some
argue that wearing a
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uniform
will give the impression of discipline and coordination in a
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workplace
, others argue that wearing the same cloths,
especially
on a long run, could lead to unwanted psychological effects on
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employees
. Although the former group suggests
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some
valid points, I
strongly
believe that taking the
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staff’s
feelings about their
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workplace
is
crucially
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important
and should be the
first
priority of a
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company
.

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Many
corporations,
especially
the ones that receive clients on a daily basis, are fond of the
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idea
of unique appearance and believe it would create a better picture of their
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company
. Airlines, with their fancy and chic
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uniforms
, are one of those
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workplaces
that dictate
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dress
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code and
they
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expect
absolute conformity to it.
As a result
, female flight attendances
usually
complain about the fact that they
are obliged
to wear high-hill shoes or miniskirts for long working hours. Although
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some
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companies
take their
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employees’
comfort into account while choosing a
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uniform
, it is not the
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only
challenge that
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staff
are facing in such workplaces.

We, human, are fond of
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changes and
we dislike routines.
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People
may not have always the option to
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change
their
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job
when they feel bored with the routines,
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but
their appearance is one thing that they should be free to
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make
decisions about. Having a day-in-day-out
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job
can be frustrating to
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many
and wearing the same clothes to work every day,
undoubtedly
, can contribute to minor depressions. A study documented that while choosing a
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job
, both male and female
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staff
,
rather
look for
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workplaces
that give them the freedom of
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appearance and
they have stated that between an
equally
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good
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job
offers, they will choose the one that would not dictate any sort of
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dress
code.

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Some
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workplaces
such as hospitals have no choice
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but
to define
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some
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dress
code
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so
patients and clients would know the role each
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employee
is playing in the system. There is no workaround in such
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workplaces
,
yet
, it is
still
plausible to have
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employee’s
best interest in mind and consider their satisfaction and comfort when choosing a
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uniform
; As
otherwise
, no matter how
beautifully
the
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staff
are dressed
, they would not function in a coordinated and disciplinary manner.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say it is a good idea for all employees to wear a uniform at work v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
389 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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