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Scientists predict that in the future cars will be driven by computers. What are the reasons behind this? Is it a positive or negative development? v.1

Scientists predict that in the future cars will be driven by computers. What are the reasons behind this? Is it a positive or negative development? v. 1
I strongly believed this statement, Technology involution has boon for entire humanity. we will try to discuss advantage and disadvantage of future cars. In 21st century human has developed new technologies such as " artificial intelligence" . Which has capability to change the entire future of world. Firstly talking about disadvantage of future cars. Difficult to understand the programming codes, which is a foundation of these cars. It might help to raise the cybercrime activities throughout the world, however, consequences will be worsed enough to demolish not only human being but also destroying nature. Industrialisation has been increasing where automation has taken place of person, which causes unemployment. This technology is quite expensive for common man. Maintainace cost also very high. Now we can discuss advantages, Future car has ability to follow rules and regulation which will help to reduce road accidents, which is biggest achievement for mankind. Due to this time saving will be possible as well as fuel consumption and cost of drive will be reduced effectively. In conclusion, I strongly agree with scientists and their efforts. Which will help people to live long and lasting.
I
strongly
believed this statement, Technology involution has boon for entire humanity.
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we
will try to discuss advantage and disadvantage of
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future
cars.

In 21st century human has developed new technologies such as
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&quot
; artificial
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intelligence&quot
;
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.
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Which
has capability to
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change
the entire
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future
of world.
Firstly
talking about disadvantage of
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future
cars. Difficult to understand the programming codes, which is a foundation of these cars. It might
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help
to raise the cybercrime activities throughout the world,
however
, consequences will be
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worsed
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enough
to demolish not
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only
human being
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but
also
destroying nature.
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Industrialisation
has been increasing where automation has taken place of person, which causes unemployment. This technology is quite expensive for common
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man
.
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Maintainace
cost
also
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very
high.

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Now
we can discuss advantages,
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Future
car has ability to follow
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rules
and regulation which will
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help
to
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reduce
road accidents, which is
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biggest
achievement for mankind. Due to this time saving will be possible
as well
as fuel consumption and cost of drive will be
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reduced
effectively
.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
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agree
with scientists and their efforts. Which will
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help
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people
to
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live
long and lasting.
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IELTS essay Scientists predict that in the future cars will be driven by computers. What are the reasons behind this? Is it a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
188 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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