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Some people say it is a good idea for all employees to wear a uniform at work To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Some people say it is a good idea for all employees to wear a uniform at work v. 1
Is this the planet or a dustbin? It is observed over a period of time that we have developed into 'dispose of' culture as the activities of the mankind have filled the environment with polythene bags and other garbage which cannot be fully disposed off and I strongly agree with this opinion. My points of the argument and the measures to prevent this nuisance are discussed further. This 'throw away' attitude of people has caused an increase in trash everywhere on earth and accumulation of this garbage have serious adverse effects on the environment. For instance, throwing off a plastic bag on the beach area or in the river, when they go deep in water, it is misinterpreted by fishes that it may be jellyfish and when they engulf this polythene bag they get choked and die. The similar situation is also observed in terrestrial animals as well, where animals like cow and buffalo eats polythene bag along with the food which cause its accumulation in their stomach. So it can be clearly seen that improper disposal of waste cause serious harm on various living creatures. In addition to this, lack of proper disposal has caused an increase in the size of 'Pirana' (the garbage dumping site in Ahmedabad) which may cause a widespread of various diseases including dengue, malaria and many others. The measures that should be taken in order to observe a significant reduction in such nuisance includes the system for separation of biodegradable and non biodegradable waste and then by separately collecting them and disposing them off. The non biodegradable material usage should be decreased or banned and also instead of throwing them off they should be reused and recycled. To sum up, this 'throw-away' culture has seriously turned environment in a 'trash can' that has a serious adverse effect on all life forms so it is necessary to establish a proper disposal system mainly by dividing waste in terms of biodegradable and non-biodegradable rubbish.
Is this the planet or a dustbin? It
is observed
over a period of time that we have developed into 'dispose of' culture as the activities of the mankind have filled the environment with polythene
bags
and other garbage which cannot be
fully
disposed
off
and I
strongly
agree
with this opinion. My points of the argument and the measures to
prevent
this nuisance
are discussed
further
.

This 'throw away' attitude of
people
has caused an increase in trash everywhere on earth and accumulation of this garbage have serious adverse effects on the environment.
For instance
, throwing
off
a plastic
bag
on the beach area or in the river, when they go deep in water, it
is misinterpreted
by fishes that it may be jellyfish and when they engulf this polythene
bag
they
get
choked and
die
. The similar situation is
also
observed in terrestrial animals
as well
, where animals like cow and buffalo eats polythene
bag
along with the food which cause its accumulation in their stomach.
So
it can be
clearly
seen
that improper disposal of waste cause serious harm on various living creatures.

In addition
to this, lack of proper disposal has caused an increase in the size of '
Pirana
' (the garbage dumping site in Ahmedabad) which may cause
a widespread of
various diseases including dengue, malaria and
many
others.

The measures that should
be taken
in order to observe a significant reduction in such nuisance includes the system for separation of biodegradable and
non biodegradable
waste and then by
separately
collecting them and disposing them
off
. The
non biodegradable
material usage should
be decreased
or banned and
also
instead
of throwing them
off
they should
be reused
and recycled.

To sum up, this 'throw-away' culture has
seriously
turned environment in a 'trash can' that has a serious adverse effect on all life forms
so
it is necessary to establish a proper disposal system
mainly
by dividing waste in terms of biodegradable and non-biodegradable rubbish.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say it is a good idea for all employees to wear a uniform at work v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
328 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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