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What are the qualities that you look for in a best friend? Describe a friend, and explain what influenced you to choose this person as a best friend. Be sure to include details and examples in your answer. v.1

What are the qualities that you look for in a best friend? Describe a friend, and explain what influenced you to choose this person as a best friend. Be sure to include details and examples in your answer. v. 1
These days, most of the individuals prefer to purchase renowned consumer goods such as clothes, cars and other items. Product quality and the social status are the two cardinal reason which encourage people to buy branded goods. I believe this is a negative development because it has pernicious impacts on individual and society. Firstly, people believe that buying luxurious products from well-known companies will have better grades. This is because these companies have a goodwill in the market and guarantees the quality of the product. For example, Apple Mac has a higher standard processor and durability which other brand companies could not compete with it. This unique attribute that the reputed organization offers to their customers, fosters them to purchase it without any second thought. Secondly, for many folks branded goods are the source to show their prosperity and social status. For instance, a person who drives Mercedes would command a great deal to respect of his wealth. Therefore, many people are influenced by what others think about them and foster them to go for high value products. Despite having its high class and social status, it affects the individual and environment adversely. In relation to the individual, many people squander their money on high priced products frivolously even though there are a lot of companies available which offers the same facilities at a lower price. To cite an example, Samsung offers the same feature as apple at a lower price. In relation to the environment, these products may use non recyclable plastics which people fritter away into the trash when they buy a new product. Hence, these metals cannot be reused, which have noxious impacts the nature. To conclude, individuals facilitate themselves with the luxury goods in order to show off to the society for respect and for the quality these high brand companies offer. In my opinion, this is definitely a negative development as peoples' extravagant money on luxurious materials which have detrimental impacts on people and society.
These days, most of the
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individuals
prefer to
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purchase
renowned consumer
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goods
such as clothes, cars and other items.
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Product
quality and the social status are the two cardinal reason which encourage
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people
to
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buy
branded
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goods
. I believe this is a
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negative
development
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because
it has pernicious impacts on
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individual
and society.

Firstly
,
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people
believe that buying luxurious
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products
from well-known
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companies
will have better grades. This is
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because
these
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companies
have a goodwill in the market and guarantees the quality of the
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product
.
For example
, Apple Mac has a higher standard processor and durability which other brand
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companies
could not compete with it. This unique attribute that the reputed organization
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offers
to their customers, fosters them to
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purchase
it without any second
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thought
.
Secondly
, for
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many
folks branded
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goods
are the source to
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show
their prosperity and social status.
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, a person who drives Mercedes would command a great deal to respect of his wealth.
Therefore
,
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many
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people
are influenced
by what others
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think
about them and foster them to go for
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high
value products.

Despite having its
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high
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class
and social status, it affects the
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individual
and environment
adversely
. In relation to the
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individual
,
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many
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people
squander their money on
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high
priced
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products
frivolously
even though
there are
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a lot of
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companies
available which
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offers
the same facilities at a lower price. To cite an example, Samsung
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offers
the same feature as apple at a lower price. In relation to the environment, these
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products
may
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use
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non recyclable
plastics which
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people
fritter away into the trash when they
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buy
a new
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product
.
Hence
, these metals cannot
be reused
, which have noxious impacts the nature.

To conclude
,
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individuals
facilitate themselves with the luxury
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goods
in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
off to the society for respect and for the quality these
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high
brand
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companies
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offer
. In my opinion, this is definitely a
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negative
development as peoples' extravagant money on luxurious materials which have detrimental impacts on
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people
and society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay What are the qualities that you look for in a best friend? Describe a friend, and explain what influenced you to choose this person as a best friend. Be sure to include details and examples in your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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