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Some people say international sports event help in world peace? Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say international sports event help in world peace? v. 1
Some individual states that global games events are advantageous for community peace. This essay agrees that global game events play a vital role in world peace. Firstly, this essay will discuss the sense of brotherhood and exchange of tradition among the worldwide people and secondly, it will discuss the favoritism of games authority to create new country order frequently for international events. Global games give thrive to brotherhood along with the exchange of tradition all over the world. People of different communities gather in one place, play together, stay together, which develops a sense of brotherhood among them and obviously when people of different countries meet they share their traditions with each other. For Example, in Olympics games which are started in 2014, the player from around the world gather in the same place and show brotherhood and an exchange of traditions. International games authority should very care full while organizing the event as they always try to organize the event in different countries because if the event will always have held in the same country then this might be the un-justice for other countries player. Every country should get the chance to host the event this will support their players and country in both ways financially and sportsman spirit. For example, since the 2008 Champions Trophy series of cricket is always held in India no matter which country team is winning, which lead other country players in sense of un-justice. In conclusion, essay agrees that global games events are helpful for peace; provide friendship between player and countries, interchange traditions and biases of global games authority for building new event order with a regular interval of time.
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individual states that
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global
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games
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events
are advantageous for community peace. This essay
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agrees
that
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global
game
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events
play a vital role in world peace.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the sense of
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brotherhood
and exchange of
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tradition
among the worldwide
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people
and
secondly
, it will discuss the favoritism of
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games
authority to create new
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country
order
frequently
for international
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events
.

Global
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games
give thrive to
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brotherhood
along with the exchange of
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tradition
all over the world.
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People
of
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different
communities gather in one place, play together, stay together, which develops a sense of
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brotherhood
among them and
obviously
when
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people
of
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different
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countries
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meet
they share their
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traditions
with each other.
For Example
, in Olympics
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games
which are
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started
in 2014, the
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player
from around the world gather in the same place and
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show
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brotherhood
and an exchange of traditions.

International
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games
authority should
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very
care full while organizing the
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event
as they always try to organize the
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event
in
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different
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countries
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because
if the
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event
will always have held in the same
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country
then this might be the
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un-justice
for other
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countries
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player
. Every
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country
should
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get
the chance to host the
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event
this will support their
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players
and
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country
in both ways
financially
and sportsman spirit.
For example
, since the 2008 Champions Trophy series of cricket is always held in India no matter which
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country
team is winning, which lead other
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country
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players
in sense of
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un-justice
.

In conclusion
, essay
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agrees
that
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global
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games
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events
are helpful for peace; provide friendship between
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player
and
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countries
, interchange
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traditions
and biases of
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global
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games
authority for building new
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event
order with a regular interval of time.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say international sports event help in world peace? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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