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Some people say educational success is because of good teachers where as others say it depends on students. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say educational success is because of good teachers where as others say it depends on students. v. 1
Few people state that good educators are primarily responsible for the academic fulfilment while others claim that good learners are more responsible for their own academic achievement. In my opinion, good teachers have more role in the academic success of students when compared to the students themselves. To begin with, an excellent educator can work wonders with any student. An ideal teacher creates a good classroom environment which enables students to properly utilise all the resources available for them. Also, as the teacher is primarily responsible to ensure the completion of any given course and to provide guidance to students, their role in a student's success is extremely significant. There are many exemplary teachers who teach and guide from rudimentary level. They in turn not only reduce the efforts of learning, but also make the learning quiet involved and result oriented. Secondly, the role of a teacher is not only to teach, but also to inspire them beyond the classroom in their lives. There are a number of examples where young students from humble backgrounds are touched by the advice of their teachers and have excelled in their academics. The world famous scientist Dr. Albert Einstein was a professor and influenced many young minds and innovations apart from his personal inventions. On the other hand, students definitely play an important role in their own academic success. Their dedication and hard work towards education helps them achieve the goals. There are few gifted students who have outstanding focus and strength to work in adverse conditions without much guidance. In conclusion, although educational success in its entirety is complex for analysis, the role of an educator is more crucial in many ways than students as stated above. An average ward can show an excellent performance in academics when he has a good teacher but not vice-versa.
Few
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people
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educators are
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responsible for the
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academic
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fulfilment
while others claim that
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good
learners are more responsible for their
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own
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academic
achievement. In my opinion,
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good
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teachers
have more
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role
in the
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academic
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success
of
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students
when compared to the
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students
themselves.

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begin
with, an excellent educator can work wonders with any
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student
. An ideal
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teacher
creates a
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good
classroom environment which enables
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students
to
properly
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utilise
all the resources available for them.
Also
, as the
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teacher
is
primarily
responsible to ensure the completion of any
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given
course and to provide guidance to
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students
, their
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role
in a student's
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success
is
extremely
significant. There are
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many
exemplary
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teachers
who teach and guide from rudimentary level. They in turn not
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only
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reduce
the efforts of learning,
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but
also
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make
the learning quiet involved and result oriented.

Secondly
, the
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role
of a
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teacher
is not
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only
to teach,
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but
also
to inspire them beyond the classroom in their
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lives
. There are a number of examples where young
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students
from humble backgrounds
are touched
by the advice of their
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teachers
and have excelled in their
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academics
. The world
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famous
scientist Dr. Albert Einstein was a professor and influenced
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many
young minds and innovations apart from his personal inventions.

On the other hand
,
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students
definitely play an
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important
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role
in their
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own
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academic
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success
. Their dedication and
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hard
work towards education
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helps
them achieve the goals. There are few gifted
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students
who have outstanding focus and strength to work in adverse conditions without much guidance.

In conclusion
, although educational
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success
in its entirety is complex for analysis, the
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role
of an educator is more crucial in
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many
ways than
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students
as stated above. An average ward can
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show
an excellent performance in
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academics
when he has a
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good
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teacher
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but
not vice-versa.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say educational success is because of good teachers where as others say it depends on students. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
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