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You have been facing lot of issues at work lately. Write a letter to your Reporting Manager informing him about this. In your letter • Explain what / who is affecting your work and people's attitude towards you • What your expectations are from this work / office • How / what your manager can do to help you with these problems v.2

You have been facing lot of issues at work lately. Write a letter to your Reporting Manager informing him about this. In your letter • Explain what / who is affecting your work and people's attitude towards you • What your expectations are from this work / office • How / what your manager can do to help you with these problems v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to let you know about some problems I have been encountering ever since I moved to the new team. As you are aware that my core competency is Core Java, but of late I was moved to new technology that is React JavaScript. It is altogether a new domain for me, moreover, I do not have any prior experience which is impacting my productivity in daily activities, for example, it took me 5 days to complete a piece of code which otherwise was expected to be completed in 2 days. Hence my lead Thomas was furious at me which I totally understand, but at the same time it was de-motivating for me. As I am very new to technology, there would obviously be some learning curve and I would expect the team to allow me some time to cope up with the new challenge. I have always been a star performer and I am confident given some time I will come out with flying colours. Additionally, it will be great if you can permit me to attend a 5 day workshop on React Javascript which would cost around USD 500. It is a comprehensive workshop on the language which would help me to adapt quickly. I suppose this is the best way to deal with the problem. I hope you will understand my situation and support me with in the best possible way. I will be glad if you can provide some solutions from your experience. Yours faithfully, Ravinder Jallu
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to
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let
you know about
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some
problems I have been encountering ever since I
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moved
to the
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new
team.

As you are aware that my core competency is Core Java,
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but
of late I was
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moved
to
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new
technology
that is
React JavaScript. It is altogether a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
domain for me,
moreover
, I do not have any prior experience which is impacting my productivity in daily activities,
for example
, it took me 5 days to complete a piece of code which
otherwise
was
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expected
to
be completed
in 2 days.
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Hence
my lead Thomas was furious at me which I
totally
understand,
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but
at the same time it was
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de-motivating
for me.

As I am
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very
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new
to technology, there would
obviously
be
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some
learning curve and I would
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expect
the team to
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allow
me
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some
time to cope up with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
challenge. I have always been a star
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performer and
I am confident
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given
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some
time I will
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come
out with flying
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colours
.

Additionally
, it will be great if you can permit me to attend a
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5 day
workshop on React
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Javascript
which would cost around USD 500. It is a comprehensive workshop on the language which would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to adapt
quickly
. I suppose this is the best way to deal with the problem.

I hope you will understand my situation and support me with in the best possible way.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will be glad if you can provide
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some
solutions from your experience.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Ravinder
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Jallu
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay You have been facing lot of issues at work lately. Write a letter to your Reporting Manager informing him about this. In your letter • Explain what / who is affecting your work and people's attitude towards you • What your expectations are from this work / office • How / what your manager can do to help you with these problems v. 2

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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