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Some people say that education system is the only critical factor to development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? You should write at least 250 words. v.1

Some people say that education system is the only critical factor to development of a country. with this statement? v. 1
The effect of education on the development of countries. Some people see that education has significant effects on the development of the countries on the other hand, some people see that education is less affecting on progress compared to other main factors like economic situation. In this essay we will argue why education is not the only factor which affect the progress of countries. No one can deny the effect of education on progress of countries. All the invented technology nowadays is based on significant rules, these rules could not exist without scientist and educated people. The progress of countries is measured by level of education and technologies in these countries. Indeed, there have been recorded instance of nations have a high level of education are the most developed nations. These instances have bolstered the impact of education on the countries. However, there are other factors effect the progress of countries not only education. The prevailing economic conditions, one of the critical factors. For example, some countries have a high percent of educated people but, because of the poor economic situation the progress of these countries is very slow. In addition, the political situation is highly affecting the rate of progress, some countries are busy of wars rather than seeking the development. These factors are affecting not only education. In conclusion, no one can deny the impact of education on all aspects of life not only on the progress, but the idea only education is completely unfair. All countries rely on the percent of educated people to prove the degree of progress they have. In fact there is many other factors affect the development to a certain degree and significant way.
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education
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which affect the
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of countries.

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could not exist without scientist and educated
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people
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countries
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and technologies in these
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are the most developed nations. These instances have bolstered the impact of
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on the countries.

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, no one can deny the impact of
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is completely unfair. All
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countries
rely on the percent of educated
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people
to prove the degree of
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progress
they have. In fact there is
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development
to a certain degree and significant way.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that education system is the only critical factor to development of a country. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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