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Some people really like living in a big city some others prefer living in small town. which do you like better? use specific reasons to support v.1

Some people really like living in a big city some others prefer living in small town. which do you like better? use specific reasons to support v. 1
Child labour is a controversial topic. People’s opinions range from categorizing it as completely immoral to encouraging such labour since children receive the opportunity to grow and become responsible themselves. In the following, this essay will elaborate both sides. In my opinion, child labour should be prohibited, since the risks, which children have to bear with at such a young age, are unacceptable. On the one hand, child labour can be beneficial because it gives them first insights into working life and could therefore help them in finding the right career or the right school to go to. For example, children working in a shop learn how to treat clients well and how to negotiate. So, child labour can be valuable for the small ones. On the other hand, most countries which employ child labour have weak human and labour standards. For instance, children are misused as mine workers in Kongo, exploited, not paid well and treated badly. Since the danger of exploiting a child’s work force is very high and hard to control, such labour should be forbidden. Furthermore, if children had to work, they wouldn’t have time to go to school and lose the chance to get higher education and a better job. This results in a malicious circle with people getting stuck in low-paid, unrewarding jobs. For this reason, child labour is a wrong. In conclusion, child labour is a serious threat to the wellbeing and the future of every child and the potential advantages are minimal in comparison to the disadvantages. Consequently, I think that child labour should be prohibited.
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’s opinions range from categorizing it as completely immoral to encouraging such
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labour
since
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children
receive the opportunity to grow and become responsible themselves. In the following, this essay will elaborate both sides. In my opinion,
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child
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labour
should
be prohibited
, since the
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risks
, which
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children
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have to
bear with at such a young age, are unacceptable.

On the one hand,
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child
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labour
can be beneficial
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because
it gives them
first
insights into working life and could
therefore
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help
them in finding the right career or the right school to go to.
For example
,
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children
working in a shop learn how to treat clients well and how to negotiate.
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So
,
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child
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labour
can be valuable for the
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small
ones.

On the other hand
, most countries which employ
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child
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labour
have weak human and
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labour
standards.
For instance
,
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children
are misused
as mine workers in Kongo, exploited, not paid well and treated
badly
. Since the
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danger
of exploiting a
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child’s
work force is
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very
high and
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hard
to control, such
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labour
should
be forbidden
.

Furthermore
, if
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children
had to work, they wouldn’t have time to go to school and lose the chance to
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get
higher education and a better job. This results in a malicious circle with
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people
getting stuck in low-paid, unrewarding jobs.
For this reason
,
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child
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labour
is a
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wrong
.

In conclusion
,
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child
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labour
is a serious threat to the
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wellbeing
and the future of every
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child
and the potential advantages are minimal
in comparison
to the disadvantages.
Consequently
, I
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think
that
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child
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labour
should
be prohibited
.
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IELTS essay Some people really like living in a big city some others prefer living in small town. which do you like better? use specific reasons to support v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
264 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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