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What is one of the most important decisions you have made? Why was this decision important? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v.1

What is one of the most important decisions you have made? Why was this decision important? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v. 1
It is considered by some that the government is responsible for conserving the environment while some people believe that each person is accountable to preserve the nature. In my opinion, I believe that although the administration is liable to protect the natural habitat, each individual must assist the institution by supporting them in their mission. One one hand, the administration must install strict rules in place for nature conservation. In other words, they should impose restrictions on activities such as banning single use plastic, polythene bags and other harmful items which have the potential to degrade our natural habitat. To illustrate, San Fransisco Airport has recently banned the use of plastic water bottles and declared their airport plastic free. On the other side, it is the people of the community who have to be educated and made aware of the dangerous habits which are polluting our living space. In other words, every person must follow and abide by the rules set by the authorities. Moreover, they should make a conscious effort to protect the nature as much as possible. Finally, in my opinion, the government's efforts and individual's actions should go hand in hand. One would be incomplete without the other and both the efforts and actions need to be in sync for this mission to succeed. To conclude, the government and the individuals have to come together for environment conservation. It is not the responsibility of one person, but everyone as a whole. Therefore, it becomes imperative that the citizens follow the rules and restrictions laid out by the authorities that would enable the preservation of Mother Earth.
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that the
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is responsible for conserving the environment while
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some
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believe that each person is accountable to preserve the nature. In my opinion, I believe that although the administration is liable to protect the natural habitat, each individual
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must
assist the institution by supporting them in their mission.

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One one
hand, the administration
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must
install strict
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rules
in place for nature conservation. In
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other
words, they should impose restrictions on activities such as banning single
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use
plastic, polythene bags and
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other
harmful items which have the potential to degrade our natural habitat. To illustrate, San
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Fransisco
Airport has recently banned the
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use
of plastic water bottles and declared their airport plastic free.

On the
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other
side, it is the
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people
of the community who
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have to
be educated
and made aware of the
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dangerous
habits which are polluting our living space. In
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other
words, every person
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must
follow and abide by the
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rules
set by the authorities.
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, they should
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make
a conscious effort to protect the nature as much as possible.

Finally
, in my opinion, the
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government
's efforts and individual's actions should go hand in hand. One would be incomplete without the
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other
and both the efforts and actions need to be in sync for this mission to succeed.

To conclude
, the
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government
and the individuals
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have to
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come
together for environment conservation. It is not the responsibility of one person,
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but
everyone as a whole.
Therefore
, it becomes imperative that the citizens follow the
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rules
and restrictions laid out by the authorities that would enable the preservation of Mother Earth.
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IELTS essay What is one of the most important decisions you have made? Why was this decision important? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
269 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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