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Let’s consider first of all how people’s values have changed. What kind of things give status to people in your country? Have things changed since your parents’ time? Finally, let’s talk about the role of advertising. Do you think adver v.1

Let’s consider first of all how people’s values have changed. What kind of things give status to people in your country? Have things changed since your parents’ time? Finally, let’s talk about the role of advertising. Do you think adver v. 1
During the past few years, the learning pattern of the students has changed dramatically. Traditional schooling focused more on classroom and book-based learning, while modern learning focuses more on the use of technologies. Although advanced technologies impart flexibility in learning, it lacks the feedback and accuracy of the information. In the following paragraphs, I am going to emphasis on positive and negative effects of this development. The greatest benefit of using books as a source of study is that those are more reliable. Scientist and writers spent their valuable time on getting the fact and writing books which are evidenced based and authenticated. Secondly, in-class learning creates a lively environment for learning. They can ask their question directly to the teacher who has much experience and knowledge in a specific subject area. For example, during my high school period, I was weak in maths. I have tried to get online tuitions on probability chapter. But I found that I learned better about this while I was discussing my confusions with my teacher. On other hand, this style of gaining knowledge is limited, as we need a teacher or a book whenever we want to learn. In other words, we are more dependent on physical sources. Availability of different online learning modules solves the problem of over-dependence on physical sources. Student can learn anytime and anywhere. Unlike the traditional method, they do not need to follow specific time-table or class schedule. Moreover, the student can access to some online journals and result of certain research on their area of study. In contrast, there are chances of getting trapped in the wrong information. Because some information which is available online is not much accurate, and anybody can post and edit that information. So, finding a trustworthy learning module is a crucial decision which growing students might find difficult, and get accused by faulty information. To conclude, school-based learning help to gather research-based information while use of the technologies gives more flexibility in learning. Both have their advantages and disadvantages, so the student should focus on their learning outcomes and choose the method of studying wisely.
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pattern of the
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has
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. Traditional schooling focused more on classroom and book-based
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learning
, while modern
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learning
focuses more on the
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use
of technologies. Although advanced technologies impart flexibility in
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learning
, it lacks the feedback and accuracy of the
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information
. In the following paragraphs, I am going
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positive
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negative
effects of this development.

The greatest benefit of using books as a source of study is that those are more reliable. Scientist and writers spent their valuable time on getting the fact and writing books which
are evidenced
based and authenticated.
Secondly
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class
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learning
creates a lively environment for
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learning
. They can ask their question
directly
to the teacher who has much experience and knowledge in a specific subject area.
For example
, during my high school period, I was weak in
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maths
. I have tried to
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tuitions on
probability chapter.
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I found that I learned better about this while I was discussing my confusions with my teacher. On other hand, this style of gaining knowledge
is limited
, as we need a teacher or a book whenever we want to learn.
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, we are more dependent on physical sources.

Availability of
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online
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modules solves the problem of over-dependence on physical sources.
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Student
can learn anytime and anywhere. Unlike the traditional method, they do not need to follow specific time-table or
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schedule.
Moreover
, the
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student
can access to
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some
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online
journals and result of certain research on their area of study.
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, there are chances of getting trapped in the
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wrong
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information
.
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which is available
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online
is not much accurate, and anybody can post and edit that
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information
.
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So
, finding a trustworthy
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learning
module is a crucial decision which growing
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students
might find difficult, and
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get
accused by faulty information.

To conclude
, school-based
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learning
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help
to gather research-based
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information
while
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use
of the technologies gives more flexibility in
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learning
. Both have their advantages and disadvantages,
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so
the
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student
should focus on their
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learning
outcomes and choose the method of studying
wisely
.
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IELTS essay Let’s consider first of all how people’s values have changed. What kind of things give status to people in your country? Have things changed since your parents’ time? Finally, let’s talk about the role of advertising. Do you think adver v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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