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Some people prefer working for a very large company that has several hundred employees. Others prefer working for a small company where they know all of their co-workers. Which do you prefer? v.2

Some people prefer working for a very large company that has several hundred employees. Others prefer working for a small company where they know all of their co-workers. Which do you prefer? v. 2
All the firms and work places can be considered in two main categories, the ones which are huge companies encompassing a large number of employees and the ones which are small and include limited number of staffs. Although working in large companies have some benefits, the convenience and helpful close relationships in small work places can not be disregarded. The following essay deals with the reasons supporting this point of view. Undoubtedly, when working in places which having interaction with a considerable number of people is an inherent feature of, experiencing a wide various range of relationship with different people would be inevitable. Therefore, it provides the opportunity of acquiring effective lessons about your life in communicating with a lot of co-workers and managers. For instance, you learn how to put up with different behaviors and situations although they might be in contrast with your desires. In addition, you would have a great fortune of developing your skills and abilities. Since, you would be able to benefit from different people’s knowledge and experiments about any aspects of working requirements. However, in small companies people have more chance to experience close and intimate relationships which contributes some pleasant consequences. First, people can feel more convenient and relaxed and consequently can work in a friendly environment far from probable worries and stresses related to large places not knowing other staffs. In other words, having kindly relationships and knowing about other employees and managers leads to reassurance about their treatments and finally self-confidence to conduct your career more efficiently. Second, having more peaceful and pleasant interactions with others helps to observe more eagerly cooperation between office workers. And obviously these keen team workings not only satisfy the workers who have always wished for a way to enhance their professions and meet their ambitions, but also influence the thriving of the company positively. Finally it can be concluded that besides the decent effects of working in large companies, the appropriate circumstances provided in small firms should be taken into consideration.
All the firms and work
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places
can
be considered
in two main categories, the ones which are huge
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companies
encompassing a
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large
number of employees and the ones which are
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small
and include limited number of staffs. Although
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working
in
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large
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companies
have
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some
benefits, the convenience and helpful close
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relationships
in
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small
work
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places
can not
be disregarded
. The following essay deals with the reasons supporting this point of view.

Undoubtedly
, when
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working
in
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places
which having interaction with a considerable number of
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people
is an inherent feature of, experiencing a wide various range of
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relationship
with
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different
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people
would be inevitable.
Therefore
, it provides the opportunity of acquiring effective lessons about your life in communicating with
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a lot of
co-workers and managers.
For instance
, you learn how to put up with
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different
behaviors and situations although they might be
in contrast
with your desires.
In addition
, you would have a great fortune of developing your
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skills
and abilities. Since, you would be able to benefit from
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different
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people’s
knowledge and experiments about any aspects of
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working
requirements.

However
, in
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small
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companies
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people
have more chance to experience close and intimate
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relationships
which contributes
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some
pleasant consequences.
First
,
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people
can feel more convenient and relaxed and
consequently
can work in a friendly environment far from probable worries and
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stresses
related to
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large
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places
not knowing
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other
staffs. In
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other
words, having kindly
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relationships
and knowing about
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other
employees and managers leads to reassurance about their treatments and
finally
self-confidence to conduct your career more
efficiently
. Second, having more peaceful and pleasant interactions with others
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helps
to observe more
eagerly
cooperation between office workers. And
obviously
these keen team
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workings
not
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only
satisfy the workers who have always wished for a way to enhance their professions and
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meet
their ambitions,
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but
also
influence the thriving of the
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company
positively
.

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Finally
it can
be concluded
that
besides
the decent effects of
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working
in
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large
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companies
, the appropriate circumstances provided in
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small
firms should
be taken
into consideration.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer working for a very large company that has several hundred employees. Others prefer working for a small company where they know all of their co-workers. Which do you prefer? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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