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Some students prefer to study at a large university that has several thousand students. Other students prefer studying at a small school that has only a few hundred students. Which type of these two types of schools do you prefer? v.1

Some students prefer to study at a large university that has several thousand students. Other students prefer studying at a small school that has only a few hundred students. Which type of these two types of schools do you prefer? v. 1
Although studying at small schools seems more peaceful, the benefits of studying at a large university whit thousands of students in broadening our horizon should be taken in to consideration. The following essay deals with the reasons supporting this point of view. Undoubtedly, small universities according to accommodating less number of people such as students and faculties would provide a less crowded and more relaxed place. The resulted quietness in the educational place can contribute to the tranquility of the local residents to have more concentration on their work and study without noisy disturbances and disruptions of a crowded place. Furthermore, the limited number of people leads to more friendly environment and relationships which can increase the chance of more effective group workings. Since, great bonds between the members of a group would cause the decent situation for cooperation and achieving beneficial results. However, studying at large universities with considerable number of people helps expanding our knowledge and experiences in communicating with a large number of different people. First, the possibility of attending in various seminars taking place in these universities, brings the students the opportunity of listening and benefiting from valuable lectures of scientists and professors. Since, their speeches would contain cutting edge information about science and technology and help students in their specific projects or even final thesis. Second, a wide range of experiences such as exchanging information and new relationships would be another effective acquirement for the students. They can not only benefit from a broad range of communications and active educational environment, but also satisfy their excitement and enthusiasm for knowing more people and making new friends. Finally, it can be concluded that, besides the peaceful atmosphere of small schools which is admired by a lot of people, studying at large universities provides the opportunity of keeping up with the novel studies of science world and new advancements of technology.
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large
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whit thousands of
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in broadening our horizon should
be taken
in to consideration. The following essay deals with the reasons supporting this point of view.

Undoubtedly
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small
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according to accommodating less
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number
of
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people
such as
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students
and faculties would provide a less crowded and more relaxed
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place
. The resulted quietness in the educational
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place
can contribute to the tranquility of the local residents to have more concentration on their work and study without noisy disturbances and disruptions of a crowded
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place
.
Furthermore
, the limited
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number
of
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people
leads to more friendly environment and relationships which can increase the chance of more effective group workings. Since, great bonds between the members of a group would cause the decent situation for cooperation and achieving beneficial results.

However
,
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studying
at
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large
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universities
with considerable
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number
of
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people
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large
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number
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different
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.
First
, the possibility of attending in various seminars taking
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place
in these
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universities
, brings the
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students
the opportunity of listening and benefiting from valuable lectures of scientists and professors. Since, their speeches would contain cutting edge information about science and technology and
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help
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students
in their specific projects or even final thesis. Second, a wide range of experiences such as exchanging information and new relationships would be another effective acquirement for the
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students
. They can not
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benefit from a broad range of communications and active educational environment,
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also
satisfy their excitement and enthusiasm for knowing more
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people
and making new friends.

Finally
, it can
be concluded
that,
besides
the peaceful atmosphere of
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small
schools which
is admired
by
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a lot of
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people
,
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studying
at
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large
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universities
provides the opportunity of keeping up with the novel studies of science world and new advancements of technology.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some students prefer to study at a large university that has several thousand students. Other students prefer studying at a small school that has only a few hundred students. Which type of these two types of schools do you prefer? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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