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In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Make a list of advantages and disadvantages. Which is better: living in a large city or a small community? v.4

In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community? Make a list of advantages and disadvantages. Which is better: living in a large city or a small community? v. 4
These days most people prefer living in big cities and become more individual. While some time ago, they used to live in the countryside, where everyone knew each other. On one hand, I agree that living in the countryside is harder, than is seems to be, because it is related with the lack of availability to the many areas of social services. However, I suppose there are varieties of benefits that small villages can offer to people. One of the main benefits is connected with fresh air. Since the development of the city air pollution level increased rapidly. Due to the heavy traffic and industries in the cities, air pollution became harmful not only for adults, but also for children and causes the increase of chronic diseases. Another reason is that living in a small neighbourhood makes our life easier. It means that life in a village keeps both physical and mental health and makes your life more relaxed, than in urban areas. On the other hand, there are some disadvantages of living in a small centre that is deeply connected with people’s needs of continuous improvement. In my opinion, in a small neighbourhood the level of development became lower and sometimes removes from the present. Firstly, it is because of the lack of new acquaintances and entertainment. As it was said earlier, in a small association, people know each other and over time it becomes an obstacle to the improvement of cognitive, communication and competitive skills. Secondly, there are no work perspectives in comparison with urban areas, where employees usually boost their professional skills. So, as everybody knows, the person always needs to develop, and continuous advancement is possible only in a competitive environment, where there are a huge number of different people. Consequently, there are several advantages and disadvantages of living in a small society, but in my opinion, there are more disadvantages. However, living in such areas good for health and can be comfortable for another group of people who find living in a small state better than wherever.
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. One of the main benefits
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both physical and mental health and
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your life more relaxed, than in urban areas.

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that is
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needs of continuous improvement. In my opinion, in a
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the level of development became lower and
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association,
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know each other and over time it becomes an obstacle to the improvement of cognitive, communication and competitive
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usually
boost their professional
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in a competitive environment, where there are a huge number of
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people
.

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but
in my opinion, there are more disadvantages.
However
,
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in such areas
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good
for health and can be comfortable for another group of
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state better than wherever.
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IELTS essay In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community? Make a list of advantages and disadvantages. Which is better: living in a large city or a small community? v. 4

Essay
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4 paragraphs
342 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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