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Some people prefer travelling alone when they experience a new country for culture while others prefer having some company Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.2

Some people prefer travelling alone when they experience a new country for culture while others prefer having some company 2
Since last centuries and till today travelling is still considered the most beautiful experience anyone can have. While some people enjoy travelling alone to learn about the culture of the country and discover its other part. Others believe that traveling with friends will have a positive impact on the group. On the first hand, travelling alone have a lot of advantages. Firstly, you can follow your own schedule and decide what type of activities should be done. In fact, when you travel with a group you are obliged to follow their agenda. For instance, if you like to spend more time discovering the museum of that country this will not be possible when you are in a group. Secondly what is also considered important is sharing rooms with others. Most people don' t like the share the same rooms and bathrooms to prevent any cleanness. Actually this will affect the person in a negative way knowing that he traveled to enjoy and have a good mood. On the second-hand, we should also emphasis on the advantages of travelling with a companion. Starting with sharing information and discussing different point of views. This will not be feasible when travelling alone. Usually with the friends we share a good moments and we keep the best memories. Moreover, we should not forget that the purpose of the travel is not only to learn about the culture of the city Indeed, many of people travel to have fun and experience the night life of that city. When you travel with a group you can enjoy all the night activities. Finally, although travelling alone will make you the leader of your trip and will decrease the tension if you don' t agree with your companion one some activities. I still believe that travelling with group is more beneficial and will result in more joy.
Since last centuries and till
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today
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travelling
is
still
considered the most
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beautiful
experience anyone can have. While
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some
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people
enjoy
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travelling
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alone
to learn about the culture of the country and discover its other part. Others believe that traveling with friends will have a
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positive
impact on the group.

On the
first
hand,
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travelling
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alone
have
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a lot of
advantages.
Firstly
, you can follow your
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own
schedule and decide what type of activities should
be done
. In fact, when you
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travel
with a
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group
you
are obliged
to follow their agenda.
For instance
, if you like to spend more time discovering the museum of that country this will not be possible when you are in a
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group
.
Secondly
what is
also
considered
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important
is sharing rooms with others. Most
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people
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don&
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prevent
any cleanness. Actually this will affect the person in a
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negative
way knowing that he traveled to enjoy and have a
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good
mood.

On the second-hand, we should
also
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emphasis
on the advantages of
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travelling
with a companion. Starting with sharing information and discussing
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different
point of views. This will not be feasible when
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travelling
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alone
.
Usually
with the friends we share a
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good
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moments and
we
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keep
the best memories.
Moreover
, we should not forget that the purpose of the
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travel
is not
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only
to learn about the culture of the city
Indeed
,
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many
of
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people
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travel
to have fun and experience the
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night life
of that city.
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When
you
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travel
with a
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group
you can enjoy all the night activities.

Finally
, although
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travelling
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alone
will
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make
you the leader of your trip and will decrease the tension if you
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don&
#039; t
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agree
with your companion one
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some
activities. I
still
believe that
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travelling
with
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group
is more beneficial and will result in more joy.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer travelling alone when they experience a new country for culture while others prefer having some company 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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