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Task 2 As the number of cars increases more money has to be spent on road systems Some people think the government should pay for this Others however think that the user should cover the costs Discuss and give your opinion v.2

Task 2 As the number of cars increases more money has to be spent on road systems Some people think the government should pay for this Others however think that the user should cover the costs Discuss and give your opinion v. 2
Due to the development of technology, more and more cars are producted and sold. Hence, the amount of money spent on road systems increases day by day. Some opinions say thay the government should pay for this but the other think that people should cover the costs. I believe that both of which are necessary. Firstly, the goverment have responsibility provide the well life for people. That is reason why the goverment should pay out for road systems. Besides, the goverment give lots of taxes on transportation so they should you the money which were received from taxes to pay for repairing and advancing road systems. For example, the Da Nang goverment built lots of bridges, roads to prevent people from traffic jam and make the spirit of people become happy. Secondly, people have to give their hand to build the road systems. The reason is that people spent many time on driving to their companies, their homes or even their picnics. If the highways were decreased in its qualities, bulk of mistakes belongs to the drivers who drive strucks, cars, motobikes. In instances, the repairing cost for a higway is 100 millions dong, drivers should pay out 50 millions. The another part will be for the government. This cooperation will bring a incisive relationship between the government and local people. To sum up, the responsibility which spent on road systems not belong to individual person. When the drivers pay out for bulding road systems, they will received the best service. On the other hand, if the goverment use money for this, they will have a big support from local people. All of this will make contry become develope in economic.
Due to the development of technology, more and more cars are
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producted
and sold.
Hence
, the amount of money spent on
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road
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systems
increases day by day.
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Some
opinions say
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thay
the
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government
should
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pay
for this
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but
the other
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think
that
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people
should cover the costs. I believe that both of which are necessary.

Firstly
, the
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goverment
have responsibility provide the well life for
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people
.
That is
reason why the
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goverment
should
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pay
out for
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road
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systems
.
Besides
, the
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goverment
give lots of taxes on transportation
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so
they should you the money which
were received
from taxes to
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pay
for repairing and advancing
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road
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systems
.
For example
, the
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Da
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Nang
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goverment
built lots of bridges,
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roads
to
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prevent
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people
from traffic jam and
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make
the spirit of
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people
become happy.

Secondly
,
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people
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have to
give their hand to build the
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road
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systems
. The reason is that
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people
spent
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many time
on driving to their
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companies
, their homes or even their picnics. If the highways
were decreased
in its qualities, bulk of mistakes belongs to the drivers who
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drive strucks
, cars,
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motobikes
. In instances, the repairing cost for a
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higway
is 100 millions dong, drivers should
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pay
out 50 millions. The another part will be for the
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government
. This cooperation will bring
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a
incisive relationship between the
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government
and local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

To sum up, the responsibility which spent on
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road
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systems
not belong to individual person. When the drivers
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pay
out for
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bulding
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road
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systems
, they will
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received
the best service.
On the other hand
, if the
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goverment
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use
money for this, they will have a
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big
support from local
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people
. All of this will
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make
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contry
become
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develope
in economic.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes

IELTS essay Task 2 As the number of cars increases more money has to be spent on road systems Some people think the government should pay for this Others however think that the user should cover the costs Discuss and give your opinion v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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