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Some people prefer to travel with a companion, other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers v.2

Some people prefer to travel with a companion, other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers v. 2
When people go for a walk, travel, or fly, the most important thing is journey itself rather than the arrival. The more interesting the journey, the more amount of boredom is reduced. Travelling is one of the circumstances that create healthy relationships between people. Travelling with a peer is better than travelling alone because travellers enjoy more and are more secured when they are accompanied. First, a companion brings extra joy in a journey which will allow both of the travellers to enjoy their trip. There is an African proverb that says, " one bothers, but two have fun. " Accompanied, people have the opportunity to crack jokes, talk about things they value, and more importantly learn from one another. All of these factors will make travellers enjoy their journeys. For instance, one day I went to visit one of my friends named Gaelle. She lives 15 kilometers away from my home. At first I felt bored to go there, but when another friend of mine told me he was also going, I felt more energized to go. However, I was still concerned about the distance. As we set off, my friend and I started to discuss our academics. We kept on moving towards Gaelle' s house in the meantime. We both loved talking about our classes so much that we did not realize that we were reaching Gaelle' s house. To me, it felt like a two minutes walk while we had spent two hours walking. Because I was walking with a friend, I felt energized and enjoyed the trip. Second, travelling with a friend reinforces one' s security. Alone someone may face many problems on his or her way, and nobody will care. That is why having a friend who old one accountable on the way is great. My friend' s sister, Sally, was a solitary woman. She defended everybody to accompany her to the bookstore one day. Then, on her way she started having respiratory problems because she suffers asthma. When she fell down nobody on the road could help her, for she could not tell them that she is asthmatic. She suffered the consequence of going alone. Had she have a accountable companion, she would have received appropriate treatement on spot. In conclusion, travelling with a companion is better because the companion is a potential healer and contributes to one' s happiness during his or her journey. With a peer, people barely feel bored because they have the opportunity to talk to someone. Also, companion reinforces one' s security due to the fact that companions can act if anything wrong occurs. Due to the numerous advantages they provide, people should travel with companions.
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people
go for a walk, travel, or
fly
, the most
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important
thing is
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journey
itself
rather
than the arrival. The more interesting the
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journey
, the more amount of boredom is
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reduced
.
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Travelling
is one of the circumstances that create healthy relationships between
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people
.
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with a peer is better than
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travelling
alone
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because
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travellers
enjoy more and are more secured when they
are accompanied
.

First
, a
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companion
brings extra joy in a
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journey
which will
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allow
both of the
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travellers
to enjoy their trip. There is an African proverb that says,
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; one bothers,
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but
two have fun.
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; Accompanied,
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people
have the opportunity to crack jokes, talk about things they value, and more
importantly
learn from one another. All of these factors will
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make
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travellers
enjoy their
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journeys
.
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, one day I went to visit one of my
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friends
named
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Gaelle
. She
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lives
15 kilometers away from my home. At
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first I
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felt
bored to go there,
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but
when another
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friend
of mine
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told
me he was
also
going, I
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felt
more energized to go.
However
, I was
still
concerned about the distance. As we set off, my
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friend
and I
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started
to discuss our academics. We
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kept
on moving towards
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Gaelle&
#039; s
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house
in the meantime. We both
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loved
talking about our classes
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so
much that we did not realize that we were reaching
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Gaelle&
#039; s
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house
. To me, it
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felt
like a two minutes walk while we had spent two hours walking.
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Because
I was walking with a
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friend
, I
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felt
energized and enjoyed the trip.

Second,
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travelling
with a
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friend
reinforces
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one&
#039; s security. Alone someone may face
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many
problems on
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way, and nobody will care.
That is
why having a
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friend
who
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one accountable on the way is great. My
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friend&
#039; s sister, Sally, was a solitary woman. She defended everybody to accompany her to the bookstore one day. Then, on her way she
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started
having respiratory problems
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because
she suffers asthma. When she fell down nobody on the road could
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help
her, for she could not
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tell
them that she is asthmatic. She suffered the consequence of going alone. Had she
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have
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a
accountable
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companion
, she would have received appropriate
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treatement
on spot.

In conclusion
,
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travelling
with a
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companion
is better
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because
the
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companion
is a potential healer and contributes to
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one&
#039; s happiness during
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his or her
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journey
. With a peer,
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people
barely
feel bored
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because
they have the opportunity to talk to someone.
Also
,
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companion
reinforces
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one&
#039; s security due to the fact that
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companions
can act if anything
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wrong
occurs. Due to the numerous advantages they provide,
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people
should travel with
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companions
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to travel with a companion, other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
447 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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