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It could b e argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions Which opinion do you agree with In your essay include supporting details v.2

It could b e argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions Which opinion do you agree with In your essay include supporting details v. 2
Since the beginning of time, men develop their ways of interacting with nature. In Africa, for example, people would scream in their neighborhood in order to call for a meeting. With the simple invention of the whisltle, they became able to call for their meetings without wasting much of their vocal energy. Like the whistle, many more innovations are associated to the evolution that is prevalent in the world. Technology has been created to simplify the work of humans, and many may argue that it favors them. Technology makes our lives easier and simpler because it enhances people' s happiness and expose them to educative useful resources. First, the integration of technological devices makes people feel happy to use materials they were not initially capable of using. When a device is equipped with pieces of technology, it becomes more appealling for usage. For instance, in Rwanda, people were frustrated with the idea of using communal buses. This is because taxi drivers used to set prices according to the way the client looks. That is, if a person is well dressed, the fare will be high. Patrick Buchana, a young entrepreneur in the field of computer science, developed a technology that sets the amount of money people should pay for using buses. He created a card that would take a uniform amount of money from the customer' s bank account once he or she uses a bus. This innovation made the Rwandan community happier than they were before because everybody was able to take the bus and pay a fare that is fair and not fixed with bias. Second, technology has allowed many people to access internet resources. In fact, the internet has many free resources, such as Khan academy, Kaplan, Coursera, etc, that people can use to learn. Many of these free resources are designed to provide education to people who are destitute or unable to access high quality education. The internet, which is a key technological innovation in the 21st century, makes it possible for people to exploit the available resources. One of my friend called Mark got a degree in management while he was studying online. His parents could not afford to pay his tuition fees but because of the internet he was able to learn and earn a degree freely and easily. (he was studing from home) Technology has positively transformed humans' lives by enabling them to access education easily. In conclusion, technology has made life simpler than the way life was before the advancements of technology. People are able to access courses on the internet online when they cannot afford to pay for school fees. In addition, the bias of the community can be reduced thanks to technology.
Since the beginning of time,
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men
develop their ways of interacting with nature. In Africa,
for example
,
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people
would scream in their neighborhood in order to call for a meeting. With the simple invention of the
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whisltle
, they became
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able
to call for their meetings without wasting much of their vocal energy. Like the whistle,
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many
more innovations
are associated
to the evolution
that is
prevalent in the world.
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Technology
has
been created
to simplify the work of humans, and
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many may
argue that it favors them.
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Technology
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makes
our
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lives
easier and simpler
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because
it enhances
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people&
#039; s happiness and expose them to educative useful resources.

First
, the integration of technological devices
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makes
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people
feel happy to
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use
materials they were not
initially
capable of using. When a device
is equipped
with pieces of
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technology
, it becomes more
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appealling
for usage.
For instance
, in Rwanda,
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people
were frustrated
with the
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idea
of using communal buses. This is
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because
taxi drivers
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used
to set prices according to the way the client looks.
That is
, if a person is
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well dressed
, the fare will be high. Patrick
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Buchana
, a young entrepreneur in the field of computer science, developed a
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technology
that sets the amount of money
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people
should
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pay
for using buses. He created a card that would take a uniform amount of money from the
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customer&
#039; s bank account once he or she
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uses
a bus. This innovation made the Rwandan community happier than they were
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before
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because
everybody was
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able
to take the bus and
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pay
a fare
that is
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fair
and not
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fixed
with bias.

Second,
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technology
has
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allowed
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many
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people
to
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access
internet resources. In fact, the internet has
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many
free resources, such as Khan academy, Kaplan, Coursera, etc, that
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people
can
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use
to learn.
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Many
of these free resources
are designed
to provide education to
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people
who are destitute or unable to
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access
high quality education. The internet, which is a key technological innovation in the 21st century,
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makes
it possible for
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people
to exploit the available resources. One of my friend called Mark
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got
a degree in management while he was studying online. His parents could not afford to
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pay
his tuition fees
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but
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because
of the internet he was
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able
to learn and earn a degree
freely
and
easily
. (he was
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studing
from home)
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Technology
has
positively
transformed
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humans&
#039;
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lives
by enabling them to
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access
education
easily
.

In conclusion
,
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technology
has made life simpler than the way life was
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before
the advancements of
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technology
.
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People
are
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able
to
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access
courses on the internet online when they cannot afford to
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pay
for school fees.
In addition
, the bias of the community can be
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reduced
thanks to
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technology
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay It could b e argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions Which opinion do you agree with In your essay include supporting details v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
452 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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