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Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transit such as bus, train or subway. Discuss both these positions and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transit such as bus, train or subway. v. 2
Motor wagon is the first choice for some individuals to roam around in urban areas. But many others like to use local transport like bus, train or subway. Travelling by car has its own merits while commuting by bus, train or subway will provide some unique experience and memories to cherish forever. This essay will describe why an urban transport facility is superior than a private car or taxi. Many Humans are more comfortable travelling by Car, especially families. Safety and Personal space are two main reasons due to which they prefer van. If there are old aged men or women Join with us, we would not take a risk to travel in a metro because it is difficult to board the train in peak hours and there is a possibility of a mishap. Families enjoy private space on their journey with loved ones. Journey in a local bus with Strangers is always tricky since we cannot discuss personal things openly. Because of these reasons, few people like to commute in an automobile when they are going to town. Bus, Train or Metros are generally occupied by most of the people who en route to the city. Local transport always gives us an overview of the rich and varied culture of the place. It gives us a chance to communicate with the native people and understand their way of life. Railways and Subways are much cheaper as compared to a private machine or cab. A person can cover all his day travel cost by not opting to a single car journey. Therefore most of the individuals love to use City transfers. To conclude, while travelling to urban areas, some people prefer to use a convertible and some humans opt for City Bus, Rail or Metro. Even though there are many advantages of exploring the city in a jeep, sightseeing a local city using regional transportation has numerous positives. In my opinion, Visualising an urban town with its own set of people in a domestic transit like bus, local caravan or subway is the best choice.
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first
choice for
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some
individuals to roam around in
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urban
areas.
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But
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many
others like to
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use
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local
transport like bus,
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train
or
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subway
. Travelling by
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car
has its
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own
merits while commuting by bus,
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train
or
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subway
will provide
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some
unique experience and memories to cherish forever. This essay will
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describe
why an
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urban
transport facility is
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superior than
a private
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car
or taxi.

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Many
Humans are more comfortable travelling by
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Car
,
especially
families. Safety and Personal space are two main reasons due to which they prefer van. If there are
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old
aged
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men
or women

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Join
with us, we would not take a
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risk
to travel in a metro
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because
it is difficult to board the
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train
in peak hours and there is a possibility of a mishap. Families enjoy private space on their journey with
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loved
ones. Journey in a
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local
bus with Strangers is always tricky since we cannot discuss personal things
openly
.
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Because
of these reasons, few
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people
like to commute in an automobile when they are going to town.

Bus,
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Train
or Metros are
generally
occupied by most of the
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people
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who en
route to the city.
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Local
transport always gives us an overview of the rich and varied culture of the place. It gives us a chance to communicate with the native
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people
and understand their way of life. Railways and
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Subways
are much cheaper
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
as
compared to a private machine or cab. A person can cover all his day travel cost by not opting to a single
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car
journey.
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Therefore
most of the individuals
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love
to
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use
City transfers.

To conclude
, while travelling to
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urban
areas,
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some
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people
prefer to
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use
a convertible and
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some
humans opt for City Bus, Rail or Metro.
Even though
there are
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many
advantages of exploring the city in a jeep, sightseeing a
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local
city using regional transportation has numerous positives. In my opinion,
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Visualising
an
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urban
town with its
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own
set of
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people
in a domestic transit like bus,
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local
caravan or
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subway
is the best choice.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transit such as bus, train or subway. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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