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Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transport such as bus, trains, subway. v.1

Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transport such as bus, trains, subway. v. 1
Some individuals opt for a private vehicle in going to a particular place. However, others choose to commute by bus, train and subway. In this essay, I will discuss both points of views, following what is my perspective on the matter. Among the advantages of using your own car, is the freedom to travel. A person who owns a car can plan his destination and time. This proves that the owner can utilise and saves time while he travels. Having a private car also provides safety and comfort to the owner which cannot be achieved in a public car. On the contrary, if more people own private cars, it will just add problems regarding traffic jams. In addition, driving cars can also harm the environment due to the emission of extra greenhouse gases from fuels. For the other people, using a public transport like buses, trains and subways are preferred in going to offices, schools and so on. It is indeed that commuting a bus or train is much cheaper and can save a lot of money than having own car. Another factor is that you have more time to relax as a passenger and also if more people are using public cars, damaging the environment will be less because of less pollution. On the other side of the argument, public transit can be noted to be inconvenient and often time consuming. In conclusion, though owning a car can give someone freedom to travel, I would still choose to ride a public transit. It is because it saves me money and also it is better for the environment.
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individuals opt for a private vehicle in going to a particular place.
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, others choose to commute by bus, train and subway. In this essay, I will discuss both points of views, following what is my perspective on the matter.

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, is the freedom to travel. A person who
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can plan his destination and time. This proves that the owner can
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and saves time while he travels. Having a private
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provides safety and comfort to the owner which cannot
be achieved
in a
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, it will
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problems regarding traffic jams.
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can
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harm the environment due to the emission of extra greenhouse gases from fuels.

For the other
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, using a
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transport like buses, trains and subways
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in going to offices, schools and
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on. It is
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money than having
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, damaging the environment will be less
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of less pollution. On the other side of the argument,
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transit can
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to be inconvenient and
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In conclusion
, though owning a
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can give someone freedom to travel, I would
still
choose to ride a
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transit. It is
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it saves me money and
also
it is better for the environment.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transport such as bus, trains, subway. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
268 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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