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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. v.7

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. v. 7
Change is an inevitable part of everyday life. It happens as time pass or as a consequence of one's dicision. Changes may be positive or negative depending on how we perceive them. Whereas some people are happy to live a life of routine, others embrace change and prefer a challenging world where events are unpredictable. From one point of view, people who embrace changes think that changes make their life meaningful. Firstly, changes create new opportunities, which make us to leap forward. A new job, for instance, might present challenges that push the person to adapt, acquire new knowledge, or add to their skill set. Secondly, a change can represent a break with the past and an old routine which has become boring and predictable. Finally, as well as making life more fun and interesting, new experiences can be good for our physical and mental health. We find that changes can make us experienced and valuable. On the other hand, people who don’t want to step outside their comfort zone, prefer following their daily habits. They feel satisfied with their circumstance. Perhaps they feel that routine gives them structure, maybe they are not fond of surprises or confident enough to face new challenges. They believed that staying secure and maintaining the current circumstance is the best way to live life safer. Such people have set times for performing certain functions and do things in the same way all the time. They fear the uncertainty of the unknown and may associate change with negative outcomes. For example, transition in position or status gives people worries as to whether they can manage new task. After this consideration, both sides seem to have their own merits. However, I personally think change is unavoidable and necessary if someone wants to keep up with the fast pace of modern life. Even if some people maintain a form of stability by following a routine, the world keeps spinning and evolving.
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is an inevitable part of everyday
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life
. It happens as time pass or as a consequence of one's
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dicision
.
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Changes
may be
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positive
or
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negative
depending on how we perceive them. Whereas
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some
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people
are happy to
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live
a
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life
of
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routine
, others embrace
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change
and prefer a challenging world where
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events
are unpredictable.

From one point of view,
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people
who embrace
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changes
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think
that
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changes
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make
their
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life
meaningful.
Firstly
,
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changes
create
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new
opportunities, which
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make
us to leap forward. A
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new
job,
for instance
, might present challenges that push the person to adapt, acquire
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new
knowledge, or
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add
to their
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skill
set.
Secondly
, a
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change
can represent a break with the past and an
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old
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routine
which has become boring and predictable.
Finally
,
as well
as making
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life
more fun and interesting,
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new
experiences can be
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good
for our physical and mental health. We find that
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changes
can
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make
us experienced and valuable.

On the other hand
,
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people
who don’t want to step outside their comfort zone, prefer following their daily habits. They feel satisfied with their circumstance. Perhaps they feel that
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routine
gives them structure, maybe they are not fond of surprises or confident
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enough
to face
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new
challenges. They believed that staying secure and maintaining the
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current
circumstance is the best way to
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live
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life
safer. Such
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people
have set times for performing certain functions and do things
in the same way
all the time. They fear the uncertainty of the unknown and may associate
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change
with
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negative
outcomes.
For example
, transition in position or status gives
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people
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worries
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as to whether
they can manage
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new
task.

After this consideration, both sides seem to have their
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own
merits.
However
, I
personally
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think
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change
is unavoidable and necessary if someone wants to
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keep
up with the
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fast
pace of modern
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life
. Even if
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some
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people
maintain a form of stability by following a
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routine
, the world
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keeps
spinning and evolving.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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