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A SAMPLEYou should spend about 40 miniutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views a v.2

A SAMPLEYou should spend about 40 miniutes on this task. : Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. 2
Over the last half century he pace of change in the of human beings has increased beyond our wildest expectations. This has been driven by technological and scientific breakthroughs that are changing the whole way we view the world on an almost daily basis. This means that change is not always a personal option, but an inescapable fact of life, and we need to constantly adapt to keep pace with it. Those people who believe they have achieved some security by dong the same, familiar things are living in denial. Even when people believe they are resisting change themselves, they cannot stop the world around them from changing, Sooner or lately they will find that the familiar jobs no longer appropriate. However, reaching the conclusion that change is inevitable is not the same as assuming that ' change is always for the better' . Unfortunately, it is not always the case people. A lot of innovations are made with the aim of making money for a few. This is because it is the rich and powerful people in our society who are able to impose change(such as in working conditions or property developments) that are in their own interests. In conclusion, I would say that change can be stimulating and energizing for individuals when they pursue it themselves, but that all change, including that which is imposed on people, does not necessarily have good outcomes.
Over the last half century he
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pace
of
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change
in the of human beings has increased beyond our wildest expectations. This has
been driven
by technological and scientific breakthroughs that are changing the whole way we view the world on an almost daily basis. This means that
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change
is not always a personal option,
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but
an inescapable fact of life, and we need to
constantly
adapt to
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keep
pace with it.

Those
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people
who believe they have achieved
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some
security by dong the same, familiar things are living in denial. Even when
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people
believe they are resisting
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change
themselves, they cannot
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stop
the world around them from changing, Sooner or lately they will find that the familiar jobs no longer appropriate.

However
, reaching the conclusion that
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change
is inevitable is not the same as assuming that '
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change
is always for the
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.
Unfortunately, it is not always the case
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people
.
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A lot of
innovations
are made
with the aim of making money for a few. This is
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because
it is the rich and powerful
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people
in our society who are able to impose
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change
(such as in working conditions or property developments) that are in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
interests.

In conclusion
, I would say that
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change
can be stimulating and energizing for individuals when they pursue it themselves,
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but
that all
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change
, including that which
is imposed
on
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people
, does not
necessarily
have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
outcomes.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay A SAMPLEYou should spend about 40 miniutes on this task. : Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
235 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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