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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that the change is always a good thing. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your knowledge or experience. v.8

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that the change is always a good thing. v. 8
In this competitive world, most of the people welcome change and take it positively. However, there are a few who avoid changes in their lives and prefer to lead a conventional lifestyle. This essay will discuss both the views, followed by my opinion. Nowadays, changes are inevitable. In order to achieve success and ease the daily activities, people prefer to bring changes, in terms of adopting technological advancement, exploring new career opportunities, etc. They feel that to achieve something big, they need to come out of their comfort zone and try to explore new things. Moreover, it is observed that changes are also done to cope up with existing problems. For example, the introduction of electric cars and solar cookers was widely accepted as it helped to conserve the non-renewable resources and reduce pollution. However, there are a few, especially old aged people, who are resistant to these changes. They prefer to stick to the conventional methods to carry out their daily activities. They feel that as they have mastered these skills, adopting new methods would be a risky affair to deal. They fear to experience the complexity and challenges of learning new techniques. For example, old people prefer a basic phone over smartphone as they find it complex to operate and they fear that their inefficiencies will be showcased to their grandchildren, who might make fun of them. In my opinion, in order to survive efficiently, people should accept the changes in their lives. As these changes make them competitive and help them to excel. Adapting the technological advances or even a small change in their lifestyle can make a big difference leading to a better and advanced future. To conclude, people should welcome the change as it positively impacts their lives. It's not only comforting the individuals, but also benefit the society by eradicating environmental threats. This further boost the growth and development of the nation.
In this competitive world, most of the
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welcome
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and take it
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.
However
, there are a few who avoid
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changes
in their
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lives
and
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prefer
to lead a conventional lifestyle. This essay will discuss both the views, followed by my opinion.

Nowadays,
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changes
are inevitable. In order to achieve success and
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ease
the daily activities,
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people
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prefer
to bring
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changes
, in terms of adopting technological advancement, exploring
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new
career opportunities, etc. They feel that to achieve something
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big
, they need to
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come
out of their comfort zone and try to explore
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new
things.
Moreover
, it
is observed
that
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changes
are
also
done to cope up with existing problems.
For example
, the introduction of electric cars and solar cookers was
widely
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accepted
as it
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helped
to conserve the non-renewable resources and
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reduce
pollution.

However
, there are a few,
especially
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old
aged
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people
, who are resistant to these
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changes
. They
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prefer
to stick to the conventional methods to carry out their daily activities. They feel that as they have mastered these
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skills
, adopting
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new
methods would be a risky affair to deal.
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They
fear to experience the complexity and challenges of learning
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new
techniques.
For example
,
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old
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people
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prefer
a basic phone over smartphone as they find it complex to
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operate and
they fear that their inefficiencies will
be showcased
to their grandchildren, who might
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make
fun of them.

In my opinion, in order to survive
efficiently
,
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people
should accept the
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changes
in their
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lives
. As these
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changes
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make
them competitive and
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help
them to excel. Adapting the technological advances or even a
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small
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change
in their lifestyle can
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make
a
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big
difference leading to a better and advanced future.

To conclude
,
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people
should welcome the
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change
as it
positively
impacts their
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lives
. It's not
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only
comforting the individuals,
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but
also
benefit the society by eradicating environmental threats. This
further
boost the growth and development of the nation.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that the change is always a good thing. v. 8

Essay
  American English
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318 words
6.5
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