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Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends? Use specific reasons to support your answer. v.2

Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends? Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 2
Life is full of enjoyment and grief, and we spend it with the people who are important for us. Each person has a different preference about spending his time. Some people prefer to spend it alone because they enjoy more in a solitude. However, it would be hard for me imagine my life without friends. I do not loose any opportunity to spend time with my friends because they are good motivators, they are good advisers, and they make my life full of fun and joy. To begin with, friends provide us incentives for our progress. They always inspire us to achieve our goals and greet us on our victories. For example, when I passed the board entrance test, my friends cheered me up in such a way that I motivated to pursue my dream to be a doctor more intensely. Furthermore, Friends are always with us to share our grief and sorrow. When we loose something or cannot achieve our goals, they are always with us to sympathize us. They also help us to find solutions to our problems. If I decide to spend my time alone, I can inspire my shelf or resolve my problems in isolation. In addition, friends always broaden our knowledge about different fields. When I meet my friends, I get information about new released movies, books and novels. In addition, we often talk about political issues, which help me to know about their views. We also discuss topics related to our study materials that we find difficult, and this way we can understand the topics clearly and quickly. If I prefer spending time reading books and watching news on TV alone, I get bored very easily, and can not learn more. Last but not least, when I am with my friends, I always feel happy. We all play football, basket ball, and volleyball together. This makes my muscle strong, and my mind fresh and powerful. On the other hand, spending time in loneliness does not help me to refresh my mind. Moreover, I often go with my friends for a movie, we often go to clubs for a party, and we also take a trip together, which makes my life interesting. To sum it up, some people prefer to spend their time alone. However, I always choose to be with friends because they motivate me, help me to solve my problems, and make my life full of happiness and entertainment.
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is full of enjoyment and grief, and we
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spend
it with the
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people
who are
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important
for us. Each person has a
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different
preference about spending his
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time
.
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people
prefer to
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spend
it
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alone
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because
they enjoy more in a solitude.
However
, it would be
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hard
for me imagine my
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life
without
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friends
. I do not loose any opportunity to
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spend
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time
with my
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friends
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because
they are
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good
motivators, they are
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good
advisers, and they
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make
my
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life
full of fun and joy.

To
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begin
with,
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friends
provide us incentives for our progress. They always inspire us to achieve our goals and greet us on our victories.
For example
, when I passed the board entrance
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test
, my
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friends
cheered me up in such a way that I motivated to pursue my dream to be a doctor more
intensely
.
Furthermore
,
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Friends
are always with us to share our grief and sorrow. When we loose something or cannot achieve our goals, they are always with us to sympathize us. They
also
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help us to find
solutions to our problems. If I decide to
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spend
my
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time
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alone
, I can inspire my shelf or resolve my problems in isolation.

In addition
,
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friends
always broaden our knowledge about
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different
fields. When I
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meet
my
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friends
, I
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get
information about new released movies, books and novels.
In addition
, we
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often
talk about political issues, which
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help
me to know about their views. We
also
discuss topics related to our study materials that we find difficult, and this way we can understand the topics
clearly
and
quickly
. If I prefer spending
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time
reading books and watching news on TV
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alone
, I
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get
bored
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very
easily
, and can not learn more.

Last
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but
not least, when I am with my
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friends
, I always feel happy. We all play football, basket ball, and volleyball together. This
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makes
my muscle strong, and my mind fresh and powerful.
On the other hand
, spending
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time
in loneliness does not
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help
me to refresh my mind.
Moreover
, I
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often
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go with
my
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friends
for a movie, we
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often
go to clubs for a party, and we
also
take a trip together, which
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makes
my
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life
interesting.

To sum it up,
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some
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people
prefer to
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spend
their
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time
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alone
.
However
, I always choose to be with
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friends
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because
they motivate me,
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help
me to solve my problems, and
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make
my
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life
full of happiness and entertainment.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends? Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
406 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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