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Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends? Use specific reasons to support your answer. v.1

Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends? Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 1
These days, thanks to globalization, humans can undeniably experience a wide range of cuisines from different countries. Some people believe that this trend is beneficial; however, I personally think that its drawbacks outweigh the advantages. On the one hand, it is indisputable that people can derive various benefits from this experience. Firstly, thanks to the act of importing food, citizens from different countries have chances to enjoy products that are non-existent in their areas. For example, it is effortless for Vietnamese to try sushi from Japanese restaurants or pizza from Italian ones. Furthermore, the increased diversity of food provides consumers with exotic tastes and experiences that they have not had previously, thereby enriching people’s life. On the other hand, problems associated with foreign food are noteworthy. Firstly, the popularity of imported food can absolutely have a negative impact on the consumption of local one which is considered to represent a country’s culture. Consequently, the disappearance of domestically produced food may lead to the failure to uphold the tradition as well as cultural assimilation. Secondly, local farmers and producers may struggle to find their markets, which will not only damage their profits but also the economic prosperity of a country. Additionally, there would be fewer job vacancies unless local food companies operate, hence the rate of unemployment will witness a dramatic growth. In conclusion, this trend has both negative and positive impacts on not only human life but the development of nations. Nevertheless, I strongly believe that there are more disadvantages if people continue encouraging importing food from other countries.
These days, thanks to globalization, humans can
undeniably
experience a wide range of cuisines from
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different
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countries
.
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Some
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people
believe that this trend is beneficial;
however
, I
personally
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think
that its drawbacks outweigh the advantages.

On the one hand, it is indisputable that
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people
can derive various benefits from this experience.
Firstly
, thanks to the act of importing
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food
, citizens from
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different
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countries
have chances to enjoy products that are non-existent in their areas.
For example
, it is effortless for Vietnamese to try sushi from Japanese restaurants or pizza from Italian ones.
Furthermore
, the increased diversity of
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food
provides consumers with exotic tastes and experiences that they have not had previously, thereby enriching
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people’s
life.

On the other hand
, problems associated with foreign
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food
are noteworthy.
Firstly
, the popularity of imported
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food
can
absolutely
have a
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negative
impact on the consumption of local one which
is considered
to represent a
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country’s
culture.
Consequently
, the disappearance of
domestically
produced
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food
may lead to the failure to uphold the tradition
as well
as cultural assimilation.
Secondly
, local farmers and producers may struggle to find their markets, which will not
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only
damage their profits
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but
also
the economic prosperity of a
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country
.
Additionally
, there would be fewer job vacancies unless local
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food
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companies
operate,
hence
the rate of unemployment will witness a dramatic growth.

In conclusion
, this trend has both
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negative
and
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positive
impacts on not
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only
human life
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but
the development of nations.
Nevertheless
, I
strongly
believe that there are more disadvantages if
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people
continue encouraging importing
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food
from other
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countries
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends? Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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