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Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION. v.7

Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. v. 7
E-commerce grocery shopping has gained increasing popularity these days. A few individuals prefer to purchase eatables in a traditional manner like from departmental stores while others like to shop them online. This essay will discuss both opinions and explain why purchasing of food products from shopping malls is always superior to online shopping. Purchasing consumables online makes things very convenient for people with hectic work schedule which was earlier considered as a laborious task. They can get food items delivered to their homes simply by the click of a button and in a short period of time. For example, Amazon is one of the biggest successful e-commerce website that commits 100% guaranteed delivery the next day. Therefore, the amount of people preferring to shop online is increasing day by day owing to the busy work life. Despite the convenience, the pleasure of shopping from a supermarket cannot be experienced on a computer screen. Walking through the various sections and selecting from a vast array of different products can give a positive experience. Also, reviewing of each them and then buying is always more predictable when someone wants to try something new which can be risky in online shopping. For instance, selecting the best apples from a huge pile can be really satisfying at the same time one can be sure of the quality of items purchased. Traditional shopping for grocery therefore will always be more trusted and pleasurable method. To conclude, shopping from supermarkets has faced many challenges since the introduction of online methods. This essay discussed even though grocery shopping online is more time efficient, shopping through the physical channel will always be more superior in choosing quality products. In my opinion, visiting a departmental store will always be more beneficial and pleasurable experience.
E-commerce grocery
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shopping
has gained increasing popularity these days. A few individuals prefer to
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purchase
eatables
Consider replacing "in a traditional manner" with the adverb for "traditional"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a traditional manner
like from departmental stores while others like to shop them
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online
. This essay will discuss both opinions and
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explain
why purchasing of food products from
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shopping
malls is always superior to
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online
shopping.

Purchasing consumables
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online
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makes
things
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very
convenient for
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people
with hectic work schedule which was earlier considered as a laborious task. They can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
food items delivered to their homes
simply
by the click of a button and in a short period of time.
For example
, Amazon is one of the biggest successful e-commerce website that commits 100% guaranteed delivery the
next
day.
Therefore
, the amount of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
preferring to shop
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online
is increasing day by day owing to the busy work life.

Despite the convenience, the pleasure of
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shopping
from a supermarket cannot
be experienced
on a computer screen. Walking through the various sections and selecting from a vast array of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
products can give a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
experience.
Also
, reviewing of each them and then buying is always more predictable when someone wants to try something new which can be risky in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
.
For instance
, selecting the best apples from a huge pile can be
really
satisfying at the same time one can be sure of the quality of items
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
. Traditional
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shopping
for grocery
therefore
will always be more trusted and pleasurable method.

To conclude
,
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shopping
from supermarkets has faced
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many
challenges since the introduction of
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online
methods. This essay discussed
even though
grocery
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shopping
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online
is more time efficient,
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shopping
through the physical channel will always be more superior in choosing quality products. In my opinion, visiting a departmental store will always be more beneficial and pleasurable experience.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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