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Some people find it difficult to present a speech/presentation in the public. Therefore it is suggested that public speaking should be taught in schools. Do you think it is important to know how to speak well? Do you agree or disagree with the view? v.1

Some people find it difficult to present a speech/presentation in the public. Therefore it is suggested that public speaking should be taught in schools. Do you think it is important to know how to speak well? with the view? v. 1
It is a splendid experience when one captivates the audience. However, some individuals find it hard to deliver flawless talks. As a result of this, it has been deliberated upon that this skill should be introduced into the students' curriculum. In my opinion, I believe it is pertinent to master this ability and, I strongly agree that it should be taught in schools. To start with, I opine that it is pivotal to acquire the skill of being eloquent when giving speeches because it helps to entice the people. In other words, being fluent helps to gain the attention and vote of the populace, since, they would be convinced beyond reasonable doubt that one is sure of his words. Further, it helps to convey messages in a flawless manner, effortlessly and builds confidence in the speaker. As a matter of fact, all these add up to fascinate the guests and have a comfortable aura. For instance, the President of France is always getting an applause after his speech because of his eloquence. Therefore, it is very crucial if one wants to win the audience. In addition, I totally agree that I should be added to the scheme of work of students for some reasons. Firstly, this is fundamental to achieving this task. That is to say, since students learn from school, teaching this would help into imbibe in the nitty gritty of speech preparation and presentation. Moreover, they would be taught the kind of words suitable for a specific group of people, how to appear before them and the techniques in presenting the talks. Like introducing pictures, games and questions all in a bit to engage the guests and gain their attention. Secondly, confidence will be built and fear of facing the crowd will be alleviated, if students are taught in school. Additionally, they could be organising small presentations in class to enhance this skill. For example, students who are involved in debates in schools do not nurse fear when asked to present a talk. In conclusion, it is very necessary not to be slurry in speech and this needs to be taught in schools in order to achieve accuracy in speech presentations.
It is a splendid experience when one captivates the audience.
However
,
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some
individuals find it
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hard
to deliver flawless talks.
As a result
of this, it has
been deliberated
upon that this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
should
be introduced
into the students' curriculum. In my opinion, I believe it is pertinent to master this ability and, I
strongly
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agree
that it should
be taught
in schools.

To
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start
with, I opine that it is pivotal to acquire the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
of being eloquent when giving
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speeches
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because
it
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helps
to entice the
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people
.
In other words
, being fluent
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helps
to gain the attention and vote of the populace, since, they would
be convinced
beyond reasonable doubt that one is sure of his words.
Further
, it
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helps
to convey messages
Consider replacing "in a flawless manner" with the adverb for "flawless"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a flawless manner
,
effortlessly
and builds confidence in the speaker. As a matter of fact, all these
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add
up to fascinate the guests and have a comfortable aura.
For instance
, the President of France is always getting an applause after his
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speech
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of his eloquence.
Therefore
, it is
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very
crucial if one wants to win the audience.

In addition
, I
totally
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agree
that I should be
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added
to the scheme of work of
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students
for
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some
reasons.
Firstly
, this is fundamental to achieving this task.
That is
to say, since
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students
learn from
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school
, teaching this would
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help
into imbibe in the
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nitty
gritty of
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speech
preparation and presentation.
Moreover
, they would
be taught
the kind of words suitable for a specific group of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, how to appear
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before
them and the techniques in presenting the talks. Like introducing pictures, games and questions all in a bit to engage the guests and gain their attention.
Secondly
, confidence will
be built
and fear of facing the crowd will
be alleviated
, if
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students
are taught
in
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school
.
Additionally
, they could be
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organising
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small
presentations in
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class
to enhance this
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skill
.
For example
,
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students
who
are involved
in debates in
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schools
do not nurse fear when asked to present a talk.

In conclusion
, it is
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very
necessary not to be slurry in
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speech
and this needs to
be taught
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
in order to achieve accuracy in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
speech
presentations.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people find it difficult to present a speech/presentation in the public. Therefore it is suggested that public speaking should be taught in schools. Do you think it is important to know how to speak well? with the view? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
363 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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