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Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarket while some others prefer to shop online. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.1

Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarket while some others prefer to shop online. v. 1
In this modern era, people are becoming lazier day by day as a result of this, some people prefer to buy food from online while others still like the traditional way of buying food. I will discuss the both views of buying food along with my opinion in following paragraphs. There are some people who believe that online shopping save plenty of time and grocery shopping can be done by sitting in their house and office chair with few clicks on a laptop or mobile screen and instantly move to other things along with that it also saves fuel cost as there is no need for vehicle to shop. Moreover, it also gives the opportunity to compare live prices on different websites and find out the best price at that time which will help to save money. However, others have a contradictory view that traditional way of food shopping is more satisfactory as there are some people who prefer to test the quality of the product personally. Besides, it is a better option in urgency as online shopping requires patience for items to arrive at home. Therefore, In the urgency, person can just visit the supermarket and buy food. Lastly, some people buy food from supermarkets because it gives them spend quality time with their family as some people like to go shopping with their families. As far as my opinion is concerned, I think that online shopping is more convenient because it gives 24/7 availability and product can be easily found by searching their name in the search box, while it is hard to find the exact location of product in big supermarkets. Lastly, online shopping gives cheap prices and discount on various occasions, whereas the supermarket is more expensive due to its extra charges such as parking fees and other kind of taxes. In the light of the aforementioned points, it can be said that both the groups have their own justification for their opinion. Yet, my point of view is more important for me.
In this modern era,
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people
are becoming lazier day by day
as a result
of this,
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some
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people
prefer to
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buy
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food
from
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online
while others
still
like the traditional way of buying
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food
. I will discuss the both views of buying
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food
along with my opinion in following paragraphs.

There are
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some
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people
who believe that
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online
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shopping
save
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plenty
of time and grocery
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shopping
can
be done
by sitting in their
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house
and office chair with few clicks on a laptop or mobile screen and
instantly
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move
to
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other
things along with that it
also
saves fuel cost as there is no need for vehicle to shop.
Moreover
, it
also
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gives
the opportunity to compare
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live
prices on
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different
websites and find out the best price at that time which will
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help
to save money.

However
, others have a contradictory view that traditional way of
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food
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shopping
is more satisfactory as there are
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some
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people
who prefer to
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test
the quality of the product
personally
.
Besides
, it is a better option in urgency as
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online
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shopping
requires patience for items to arrive at home.
Therefore
, In the urgency, person can
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just
visit the supermarket and
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buy
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food
.
Lastly
,
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some
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people
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buy
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food
from supermarkets
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because
it
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gives
them spend quality time with their family as
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some
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people
like to go
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shopping
with their families.

As far as my opinion
is concerned
, I
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think
that
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online
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shopping
is more convenient
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because
it
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gives
24/7 availability and product can be
easily
found by searching their name in the search box, while it is
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hard
to find the exact location of product in
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big
supermarkets.
Lastly
,
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online
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shopping
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gives
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cheap
prices and discount on various occasions, whereas the supermarket is more expensive due to its extra charges such as parking fees and
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other
kind of taxes.

In the light of the aforementioned points, it can
be said
that both the groups have their
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own
justification for their opinion.
Yet
, my point of view is more
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important
for me.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarket while some others prefer to shop online. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
337 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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