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Many people disagree with a school policy which forces children to learn new language what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Many people disagree with a school policy which forces children to learn new language what extent v. 1
It is irrefutable that language is an identity of every nation. A certain segment of society believes that in the learning Institutes, teachers should not force students to learn new language. I am family agrees with this statement. I would like to explicit it of such a measure. To begin with, learn new language would be productive for children it will provide a good knowledge to student which increase the confidence level of children. While, school policies forces to adolescence to learn a new language which can give stress to learners because study of school is already very tough due to this reason forcing to children to learn a new language can distract to children from their actual school study. Hence, in schools this kind of policies are not beneficial for children. Moreover, forcing to learn a new language can change the mood of the children to go to school learner would not go to school happily then they cannot complete their further studies only due to forcing. Furthermore, forcing to learn a new language can become irritating to children. As a result, they do not like to talk to your friends and family members, which can become a major problem for parents and children also. In addition to this without interest of children to learn a language they cannot give their best performance, which can give disappointment them. Thus, they can become less confidence which has detrimental effects on their overall performance and on their studies. In conclusion, although learning of a new language with full dedication has fruitful results. However, forcing to learn a language can ruin the overall performance of a student.
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language
is an identity of every nation. A certain segment of society believes that in the learning Institutes, teachers should not force students to
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learn
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language
. I am family
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agrees
with this statement. I would like to explicit it of such a measure.

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with,
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language
would be productive for
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children
it will provide a
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good
knowledge to student which increase the confidence level of
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children
. While,
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school
policies forces to adolescence to
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learn
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language
which can give
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stress
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language
can distract to
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from their actual
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study.
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this kind of policies are not beneficial for children.

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children
to go to
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learner would not go to
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happily
then they cannot complete their
further
studies
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to
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learn
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language
can become irritating to
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children
.
As a result
, they do not like to talk to your friends and family members, which can become a major problem for parents and
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children
also
.
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to this without interest of
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children
to
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learn
a
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language
they cannot give their best performance, which can give disappointment them.
Thus
, they can become less confidence which has detrimental effects on their
overall
performance and on their studies.

In conclusion
, although learning of a
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new
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language
with full dedication has fruitful results.
However
,
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forcing
to
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learn
a
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language
can ruin the
overall
performance of a student.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people disagree with a school policy which forces children to learn new language what extent v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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