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You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to complain to the supermarket Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket in your letter Say who you are Give details about the accident Suggest how the supermarket could prev v.1

You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to complain to the supermarket Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket in your letter Say who you are Give details about the accident Suggest how the supermarket could prev v. 1
With the advent of technology, life becomes easier in every aspect, while the blessings of science on human contribute more in the previous time or in the present, is a contentious issue. I believe that the scientific approaches are of positive sign for both in earlier and present time, but the progress in previous time comparatively more than advancement in present time. To begin, we have seen numerous scientific progress in the health sector in the past time, some names are Diagnostic machineries, Medicine and many things. As a result, people receive many advantages because the instrument anticipate to detect the disease condition. For example, diagnostic tools easily find the problem of a patient, while it could not be possible with the human eyes. Thus, previous technological development makes peoples' life easy. Also, previous development in science facilitates to spend more quality time of a family with the help of technology, such as Television. For instance, family members are hardly getting free moments due to become busy during daytime, while they could get recreation with other members from Television. Therefor, they might, somehow, manage some leisure time for family members. However, on the other side, people receive blessings from recent scientific developments, such as Mobile phone. Say for, people can easily communicate with their family members from any corner of the world as it does not need any wire, so Mobile phone could be carried on anywhere. In addition, people can easily receive the transected amounts to his family member within a fraction of seconds. As a result, their life becomes easier than previous time because does not need any verification by the human hands. To conclude, Technology brings human life easier in all time, but my argument more on previously developed instruments than modern time.
With the advent of technology,
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life
becomes easier in every aspect, while the blessings of science on
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human
contribute more in the
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previous
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time
or in the present, is a contentious issue. I believe that the scientific approaches are of
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positive
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sign
for both in earlier and present
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time
,
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the progress in
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previous
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time
comparatively
more than advancement in present time.

To
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begin
, we have
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seen
numerous scientific progress in the health sector in the past
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time
,
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some
names are Diagnostic
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machineries
, Medicine and
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many
things.
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people
receive
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advantages
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the instrument anticipate to detect the disease condition.
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, diagnostic tools
easily
find the problem of a patient, while it could not be possible with the
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human
eyes.
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,
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previous
technological development
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peoples'
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life
easy.

Also
,
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previous
development in science facilitates to spend more quality
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time
of a
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with the
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help
of technology, such as Television.
For instance
,
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family
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members
are hardly getting free moments due to become busy during daytime, while they could
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get
recreation with other
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members
from Television. Therefor, they might, somehow, manage
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leisure
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time
for
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family
members.

However
, on the other side,
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people
receive blessings from recent scientific developments, such as Mobile phone. Say for,
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people
can
easily
communicate with their
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family
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members
from any corner of the world as it does not need any wire,
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so
Mobile phone could
be carried
on anywhere.
In addition
,
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people
can
easily
receive the transected amounts to his
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family
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member
within a fraction of seconds.
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, their
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life
becomes easier than
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previous
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time
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because
does not need any verification by the
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human
hands.

To conclude
, Technology brings
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human
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life
easier in all
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time
,
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but
my argument more on previously developed instruments than modern
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time
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to complain to the supermarket Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket in your letter Say who you are Give details about the accident Suggest how the supermarket could prev v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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