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The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this? v.1

Over the years, technology has made our lives much easier. Internet is one of the advancements of this invention. Whereas, some believe that misuse of the internet causes ill effects in peoples lives. But in my view, this advancement has advantages that outweigh the disadvantages. To begin with, online facilities such as ticket reservations, bill payments, online banking, shopping, trading and social networking have made the current lifestyle fast. Sitting at our home, we are able to collect information about the other side of the world. Even during crisis, when we are restricted to go out of our premises, we are able to continue our daily routine because of the internet. For instance, during the current pandemic 'Covid-19'; when the government had announced for national lockdown, schools and colleges where still able to conduct classes through live streaming. In addition to this, online shopping for essential items have made it easier to meet our daily requirements even though we were quarantined at home. Moreover, some multi-national companies were able to continue functions by promoting their employees to work from the safety of their homes. Even the health-care workers were able to advise and prescribe drugs to their patients through video calls, images and instant messages. However, inspite of these technological advances, people abuse it, for example, organisations stress their employees to work from home despite them having completed their office hours. Due to this, their personal time, health and family life are inadvertently compromised. This neglect diverts their children to spend excess time on virtual games and social networking thereby leading to obesity and other health issues at a very young age. To summarize, I assert that the internet has evolved our present day scenario with many positive advancements yet we need to discern our requirements and time wisely for benefiting from it.
Over the years, technology has made our
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lives
much easier. Internet is one of the advancements of this invention. Whereas,
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some
believe that misuse of the internet causes ill effects in peoples
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lives
.
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But
in my view, this advancement has advantages that outweigh the disadvantages.

To
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begin
with, online facilities such as ticket reservations, bill payments, online banking, shopping, trading and social networking have made the
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current
lifestyle
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fast
. Sitting at our home, we are
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able
to collect information about the other side of the world. Even during crisis, when we
are restricted
to go out of our premises, we are
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able
to continue our daily routine
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because
of the internet.
For instance
, during the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
pandemic 'Covid-19'; when the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
had announced for national lockdown, schools and colleges where
still
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able
to conduct classes through
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live
streaming.
In addition
to this, online shopping for essential items have made it easier to
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meet
our daily requirements
even though
we
were quarantined
at home.
Moreover
,
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some
multi-national
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companies
were
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able
to continue functions by promoting their employees to work from the safety of their
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homes
. Even the health-care workers were
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able
to advise and prescribe drugs to their patients through video calls, images and instant messages.

However
, inspite of these technological advances,
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people
abuse it,
for example
, organisations
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stress
their employees to work from home despite them having completed their office hours. Due to this, their personal time, health and family life are
inadvertently
compromised. This neglect diverts their children to spend excess time on virtual games and social networking thereby leading to obesity and other health issues at a
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very
young age.

To summarize
, I assert that the internet has evolved our present day scenario with
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many
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positive
advancements
yet
we need to discern our requirements and time
wisely
for benefiting from it.
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IELTS essay The internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, The overall effect of this Technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.5
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