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You were hurt in a minor accident in a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket, Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter- Say who you are- Give details about the accident- Suggest how the supermarket could prevent s v.1

You were hurt in a minor accident in a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket, Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter- Say who you are- Give details about the accident- Suggest how the supermarket could prevent s v. 1
Shelter is vital for humankind’s survival. Moreover, a group of individuals firmly suggests that homes must be given for free to the out-pocketed members of the society. My conviction opposes with the said proposal. The Earth is a single place in the universe where human dwells. Although almost every corner of it is viable for survival, one necessitates a house in order to ensure a quality of life. It is crucial because of the following: one, it protects the holistic being against unpredictable catastrophes; two, lessen the chances of crimes such as theft and rape; lastly, it reduces the risk of catching airborne diseases. However, even though everyone aims to live comfortably in a home, not everyone can afford it. The political leaders must do advanced measures to help the off-pocketed by providing housing project as a compensation of skilled jobs or any opportunities that fit their qualifications in any public unit. Substantially, the local administrators must promote independence rather than giving everything for free. Metaphorically, the world is full of parasites in which one tends to depend its life to its host. It is analogous to some people dwelling in this world, for instance a part of the impoverish family. The said group are massively relying on the assistance of the local administration in order to make their ends meet and at some point, they put their full responsibilities in the hands of agencies of sovereignty. A stellar example of such is the “4P’s” in my country. It is a humanitarian measure by the local government that provides cash grants, including housing allowances to the poorest of the poor on a monthly basis. Consequently, the identified people depend their lives in the financial aids from the local funds and neglect regular working. Undoubtedly, the national leaders must promote independence on the necessitous by providing a shelter as a justifiable compensation of their skills. As a denouement, a house is important in one’s life, yet I disprove the idea of offering such to the needy for free. At the end of the day, the value of anything that comes easy is being taken for granted. Hence, a certain individual must strive and be independent to appreciate the existence of objects and his/her possession.
Shelter is vital for humankind’s survival.
Moreover
, a group of individuals
firmly
suggests that homes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
for free to the out-pocketed members of the society. My conviction opposes with the said proposal.

The Earth is a single place in the universe where human dwells. Although almost every corner of it is viable for survival, one necessitates a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
in order to ensure a quality of life. It is crucial
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the following: one, it protects the holistic being against unpredictable catastrophes; two, lessen the chances of crimes such as theft and rape;
lastly
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of catching airborne diseases.
However
,
even though
everyone aims to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
comfortably
in a home, not everyone can afford it. The political leaders
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
do advanced measures to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the off-pocketed by providing housing project as a compensation of skilled jobs or any opportunities that fit their qualifications in any public unit.
Substantially
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
administrators
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
promote independence
rather
than giving everything for free.

Metaphorically
, the world is full of parasites in which one tends to
The verb 'to depend' requires the preposition '(up)on': "depend on".
depend
its life to its host. It is analogous to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
dwelling in this world,
for instance
a part of
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'impoverish' is correct. If 'impoverish' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the impoverish
family. The said group are
massively
relying on the assistance of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
administration in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their ends
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
and at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
point, they put their full responsibilities in the hands of agencies of sovereignty. A stellar example of such is the “4P’s” in my country. It is a humanitarian measure by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
that provides cash grants, including housing allowances to the poorest of the poor on a monthly basis.
Consequently
, the identified
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
The verb 'to depend' requires the preposition '(up)on': "depend on".
depend
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
in the financial aids from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
funds and neglect regular working.
Undoubtedly
, the national leaders
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
promote independence on the necessitous by providing a shelter as a justifiable compensation of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

As a
'denouement' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "dénouement"
denouement
, a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
in one’s life,
yet
I disprove the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of offering such to the needy for free. At the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the day, the value of anything that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
easy is
being taken
for granted.
Hence
, a certain individual
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
strive and be independent to appreciate the existence of objects and his/her possession.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You were hurt in a minor accident in a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket, Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter- Say who you are- Give details about the accident- Suggest how the supermarket could prevent s v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
373 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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