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Some people prefer to read paper books. While others prefer to read eBooks. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.2

Some people prefer to read paper books. While others prefer to read eBooks. v. 2
There is no doubt that these days, reading is becoming increasingly important in people' s daily life. Some people enjoy reading paper books. While others prefer to read eBooks. In this essay I will discuss both sides and provide my overall opinion. Generally speaking, people who prefer to read paper books think that paper books have a special taste when they read them. Furthermore, paper books make people comfortable and relax. Also, you can turn over papers easily and take notes simply by underline or circle sentences you liked. For example, the latest researches show that 70 per cent of people enjoy reading paper books rather than eBooks. Moreover, although paper books are sometime expensive, but still have their spell to attract people to them. You can also read for hours without hurt your eyes in contrast to read eBooks which may cause pain for your eyes. On the other hand, vast majority of people prefer to read eBooks rather than paper books. They think that eBooks can be read in everywhere and any place, such as bus station while you are waiting for bus. In addition, eBooks are usually free, you can download them without pay money unlike paper books you cannot get them for free. For instance, who wants to spend money for paper books when he can get if for free from internet. In conclusion, reading is a topic which raises strong passions on both sides of the argument. In my opinion, I enjoy reading paper books they make me relax and more comfortable.
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is becoming
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people
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paper
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books
.
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While
others prefer to
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eBooks
. In this essay I will discuss both sides and provide my
overall
opinion.

Generally
speaking,
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people
who prefer to
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read
paper
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books
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think
that paper
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books
have a special taste when they
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read
them.
Furthermore
, paper
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books
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make
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people
comfortable and relax.
Also
, you can turn over papers
easily
and take notes
simply
by underline or circle sentences you liked.
For example
, the latest researches
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show
that 70 per cent of
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people
enjoy
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reading
paper
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books
rather
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than eBooks
.
Moreover
, although paper
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books
are sometime expensive,
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but
still
have their spell to attract
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people
to them. You can
also
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read
for hours without hurt your eyes
in contrast
to
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eBooks
which may cause pain for your eyes.

On the other hand
,
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vast majority of
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prefer to
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eBooks
rather
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books
. They
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that
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eBooks
can be
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read
in everywhere and any place, such as bus station while you are waiting for bus.
In addition
,
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eBooks
are
usually
free, you can download them without pay money unlike paper
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books
you cannot
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get
them for free.
For instance
, who wants to spend money for paper
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books
when he can
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get
if for free from internet.

In conclusion
,
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reading
is a topic which raises strong passions on both sides of the argument. In my opinion, I enjoy
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reading
paper
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books
they
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make
me relax and more comfortable.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
Language is to the mind more than light is to the eye.
William Gibson

IELTS essay Some people prefer to read paper books. While others prefer to read eBooks. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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