Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Nowadasy many people choose to be self-employed, rater than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v.2

Nowadasy many people choose to be self-employed, rater than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v. 2
These day a lot of people decide choosing as freelancer or establish own company rather that working as a staff in a certain company, although it is likely because of it provides flexible hour to work, but this will give rise to unstable income which they will be got as well as lack of self-development. By being self-employed many people feel that they could work every time they would freely. This because freelancers seem not attach to any company’s regulations. In spite of the fact that nowadays many companies provide flexible hour to work as well as working from home regulation, it will be different because staff have to obey and discipline each office policies. A research shows that a significant increase of demand for millennials who are the largest number of workforces working in flexible schedules achieving work-life balance, that is why they prefer being self-employed rather than sitting in the office chair. Tough, there is an undoubtedly positive reason as entrepreneur, working independently also have serious demerits. Firstly, freelancers might experience unsteady pay or having same income each month. This because of the number of projects or the amount of profit which they will be earned different every month. For instance, independent consultant have number distinct projects from client every month or even there is no project is managed in a month, if there is no project from client which means they will not have additional self-income in one month. Furthermore, it leads to lack of self-development in order to upgrade skills or other competencies due to they prefer to invest their budget to establish startup instead of paying much money to spend on training. In conclusion, people determine being entrepreneur rather than working in a certain company because of flexible schedules, so they could work every time or every where they would, nevertheless, it is quite challenging being self-employed due to they might not earn same income every month as well as do not get training in order to self-improvement.
Did you mean "this day" or "These days"?
These day
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
decide choosing as freelancer or establish
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
rather
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
as a staff in a certain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
, although it is likely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of it provides
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flexible
hour to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
this will give rise to unstable income which they will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
as well
as lack of self-development.

By being self-employed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
feel that they could
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
every time they would
freely
. This
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
freelancers seem not attach to any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company’s
regulations.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
In spite of
the fact that nowadays
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
provide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flexible
hour to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
as well
as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
from home regulation, it will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
staff
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
obey and discipline each office policies.
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "research".
A research
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that a significant increase of demand for millennials who are the largest number of
Possible spelling mistake found.
workforces
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flexible
schedules achieving work-life balance,
that is
why they prefer being self-employed
rather
than sitting in the office chair.

Tough, there is an
undoubtedly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
reason as entrepreneur,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
independently
also
have serious demerits.
Firstly
, freelancers might experience unsteady pay or having same income each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
. This
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
projects
or the amount of profit which they will
be earned
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
.
For instance
, independent consultant have number distinct
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
projects
from client every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
or even there is no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
is managed
in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
, if there is no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
from client which means they will not have additional self-income in one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
.
Furthermore
, it leads to lack of self-development in order to upgrade
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
or other competencies due to they prefer to invest their budget to establish startup
instead
of paying much money to spend on training.

In conclusion
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
determine being entrepreneur
rather
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
in a certain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flexible
schedules,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they could
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
every time or
Did you mean "everywhere"?
every where
they would,
nevertheless
, it is quite challenging being self-employed due to they might not earn same income every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
as well
as do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
training in order to self-improvement.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadasy many people choose to be self-employed, rater than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts