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Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climate. Discuss both the view and give your opinion. v.1

Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climate. v. 1
Humid weather is favoured by few people, but some mankind enjoys the life in the cool atmosphere. This essay narrates both the views and supports with my opinion. Everybody has their own preferences, likewise some people like to be in a hot climate, because by being in a hot climate, they can wear less clothes and enjoy the sun, unlike in cold weather where as one must cover the whole body to save themselves from cold and diseases related to cold weather. Hot weather kills the bacteria in the atmosphere, so such regions are healthier for human kind. Hot weather enhances fashion by letting people wear designer clothes and expose the healthy muscles and skin. But sunny weather can give problems such as dehydration and possible death because of extremely hot air. Eventually, there are other kind of people who likes the cold weather a lot, for example Oymyakon, Russia, is an extremely cold region on earth, but people living in Oymyakon are not ready to leave that place, because they enjoy cold weather. Energy does not get evaporated because of the sun, so people enjoy the cold weather. One must make the water hot to drink, so one ends up wasting heat energy just to warm up the water, or to liquidity the ice. In my thought process weather between 20 to 25 degrees Celsius is best to enjoy outdoor activities. In conclusion, weather is a very debatable topic. This essay covered why hot weather regions are preferred by human kind, whereas colder nations are much more fun as they allow people to be free from sweat. Personally, I prefer living in cold weather much more because one can easily go outdoors without having to worry about dehydration.
Humid
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is
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,
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some
mankind
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enjoys
the life in the cool atmosphere. This essay narrates both the views and supports with my opinion.

Everybody has their
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preferences,
likewise
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some
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people
like to be in a hot climate,
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because
by being in a hot climate, they can wear
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less
clothes and
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enjoy
the sun, unlike in
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cold
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weather
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where as
one
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must
cover the whole body to save themselves from
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cold
and diseases related to
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cold
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weather
. Hot
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weather
kills the bacteria in the atmosphere,
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so
such regions are healthier for human kind. Hot
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weather
enhances fashion by letting
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people
wear designer clothes and expose the healthy muscles and skin.
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But
sunny
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weather
can give problems such as dehydration and possible death
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because
of
extremely
hot air.

Eventually
, there are other
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kind
of
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people
who likes the
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cold
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a lot,
for example
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Oymyakon
, Russia, is an
extremely
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region on earth,
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but
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people
living in
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Oymyakon
are not ready to
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leave
that place,
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they
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enjoy
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cold
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weather
. Energy does not
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evaporated
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because
of the sun,
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so
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people
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the
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weather
. One
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must
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the water hot to drink,
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one ends up wasting heat energy
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process
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between 20 to 25
degrees Celsius is best to
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outdoor activities.

In conclusion
,
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is a
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debatable topic. This essay covered why hot
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regions
are preferred
by human kind, whereas colder nations are much more fun as they
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allow
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people
to be free from sweat.
Personally
, I prefer living in
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cold
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weather
much more
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because
one can
easily
go outdoors without having to worry about dehydration.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climate. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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